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Reviews For: Never Wound

TekkenR 2008-08-02 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is very creative."Never wound...what you can't kill" " Is it time to let it go and move on...start another path...another destiny" love it. What I didn't like is how you portrayed Jin and Kazuya, they seemed too EMOTIONAL. But still a great story
Divinely Ethereal 2008-06-25 ch 1,	abuseYeah, the line "Never wound what you can't kill" sounds pretty cool. Oh, right, Jin, go ahead, slash your wrists (rolls eyes). He defines Emo, that one. Sorry to say, but you have a zoo of grammatical errors this time. Was your Beta taking some personal time? ~Happy Writing!
Dilu 2008-06-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseBrilliant and Amazing are my fave adjectives, but somehow they don't seem to fit, your fic is beyond them. Nice, believable setting,good plot, well portreyed characters and brilliantly written. I like your interpretation of what happened and of the characters. I loved the moral as well and agree with it. I didn't get one thing though, what did Kazuya mean when he said "but I was there...watching you both" was he there in spirit? Hows that possible? oh and you need a little work on you grammer and tense, besides that YOUR FIC ROCKS! Happy Writing ~Dil
The One and Only Birdie 2008-06-20 ch 1,	abuseWow. That was incredibly evocative. You have a brilliant sense of rhythm, when dialogue is appropriate versus description or thought. You got into Jin's head very well! Just a touch of constructive criticism. Two things to look for: "your" (possessive) versus "you're" ("you are")and "chose" (past tense, rhymes with "rose") versus "choose." (present tense, rhymes with "blues")
Salysha 2008-06-19 ch 1,	abuseTell you what, I freaking love this! Great angst and very nice dialog. This is moving and heart-wrenching to the core. You probably should check your tenses and make sure you use the past tense throughout (emotions were released, not *emotions was release). A few commas were in places where you shouldn't have them ("Tokyo [no comma] was demolished"). Not sure I quite like the way Jin tries to escape the situation, but even that is a minor pick compared to how great the rest is. I loved the insight on Hwoarang, too. Otherwise, awesome story.
Razer Athane 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abuseNot too bad, but not your best. Its a little choppy in some places, a couple of spelling errors (Kazuya, Zaibatsu, etc) and some of the sentences don't make sense... Grammar... Otherwise, not too bad.
Jinlover6 2008-06-18 ch 1, anon.	abusegess im the 1st to review. this is great. and i think there should be more stories thats based around the tekken 6 era now.

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