oh!, This is pretty good. please write more!

Beautifully written and you have Kasumi's personality down pad right! Keep on writing this story and I look forward to more chapters!

Very good start to your story. I especially enjoyed how you portrayed Ryu and Kasumi in their first encounter (it had a well-placed touch of humor).

I hope you write more soon; I want to know where exactly the story goes from here.

definitely something i want to continue reading. i really like your writing style and the way you portray Kasumi.

good story but its weird that hayate used to be a good brother but please check out my fanfiction, its called dead hearts please!