Too sweet and lovely^^!
Great work!^^

Huh.
Not bad, I guess.

You might want to befriend spellcheck. I think you used their instead of there in one of the chapters, and you spelled Epilogue wrong...

Overall, I mean. There were some really nice parts that made me warm and fuzzy. But they don't connect, and it feels a little discombobulated.

Hmm. I can't see Neku being all assertive and calling Shiki pet names like "Angel" or so willingly proclaiming his love. It's just, not really part of his character. In my opinion at least. And Primrose; you made this big intro about her, but then in the end, she wasn't really part of the plot at all. I feel like you could have directed our attention to somewhere else more meaningful. Not much character development either. It's like, Shiki and Neku feel the same way for each other, but now that they have their obstacles out of the way, they are suddenly together. Try making their relationship more dynamic. It wouldn't hurt if they got mad at each other a few times. Real people do that you know.

I hope I'm not totally bashing your fic. Because I /do/ commend you for finishing it and sticking with it all the way through. And there /are/ some really nice things that happened. You have nice description and diction overall, it you just need to make the separate parts flow into an actual story.

Keep it up! :D

Wow! Nice! But, don't you think it was a bit short for an epilogue? Nah, don't worry about details. Thanks for continue it to the end. This is a great story!! ^^

Aww such a sweet way to end the story. Cute epilogue and so sweet

That was kind of... random and odd. Um... yeah.

Yay Joshua!!

Simply awesome story.
Some of your spelling and grammar could use some work, but other than that, its really really great. Good job.

Honestly, I love the plot at this final chapter. But again, is it a bit too short? Hmm, maybe it's just my feeling. Nah, don't worry about details. You're still done great enough! ^^

Great finale but i feel like maybe you shouldn't have left on the note of Shiki slapping him, and showing no sweetness between them. Still a great ending though! :3

Ow, so sweet! But, don't you think it was a bit short? Nah, don't worry, you're still good anyway! Keep up the good work!! ^^

Yay. Toasts and updates. And... toasts. Yummy.

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Hey this fic is so cool!
You're an awesome writer!
And you make it so cute! xD

Go Shiki! Thats right you don't have to be little mis perfect daughter anymore XD Primrose is cool and i love her hobby (kicking vending machines to see if a drink would come out) Update soon :3

This is just what I was looking for.
Neku and Shiki are my favorite pairing ever.

Ah nos... so sad! I loe it though.. continues?

Good chapters! update soon :3