I liked this story a lot. It was very enjoyable and I thought the interactions between all the characters was spot on and enjoyable.

You gramer and formatting does break down a little in later chapters, but I guess that is at least partly 's fault.

great story when are you going to write the next chapter... buffy and willow are soo cute in this story... xander life sucks the two must important people in his life leave him when he need them the most then they come back five years later and are super powered and in love and they get the happy ending... he had to deal with his greave and pain my him self for five years along and then when they come back they are happy together and he is still in pain and still along and every body think he is the bad guy... at this wait he is probliey going to kill him self or some think being abandend by those you love suck... great story you have a lot of talant and skill please write the next chapter soon

This was really a good story! I have never read a Buffy and Willow story that I like more. Great Job!

absolutely love this story!
was reading it on my phone internet thingy and almost threw a fit when half of chapter 34 didn't fit on it! i made my friend email it to me! love da story anyway

LMAO!!
The ending was great!

oh yes love it more chapters pretty please

Ooh...very much like the price of innocence exacted. Seems both a good fit I haven't seen before and nicely in line with the nature of slaying itself, which kills innocence no matter what your age.

Thought the interaction between Dawn and Giles here was fantastic. I think you've really nailed her somewhat mercurial moods, even that pesky streak of martyrdom she's picked up from Buffy. The line about coke vs. tea was especially great...throwaway line, but essential to getting her right.

first this is a great story, i dont like slash most of the time but this story is so good i have like it.

i like what you did with xander you made him into a jerk, but instead of what most writers do, and have buffy nock him out and walk away.

you made into a human who was greaveing for his anya, eye town maybe family, how hurt he was becouse buffy and willow left him. he is scard becouse he can see that willow and buffy are geting close and he is going to be left along,

please make buffy and xander friends again. even if he cant be part of what buffy and willow are doing, let him matter to them he should not be alone

An interesting thing to explore--this line of Council and Slayers and Watchers. And consistent with the prior chapter's raising of the question of where Buffy fits in all of it. At first the part about Buffy being angry struck me, but after thinking about it, I can see it. I've always ascribed a sense of martyrdom to her, but that is more what she shows to others. Anger may be the root of it she keeps for herself.

To answer your question re: the chapter's flow, I felt as though you might have dipped a little into the well of hero-seeks-wisdom-from-eccentric-Eastern-master, but I can see why you went there. As I've said before, 3rd person narration requires some vehicles for interrogating the main character's mental state.

Ah, good! Glad to see you're taking the existence of all the potentials head on. And I think you're right to have it that Buffy still thinks as though she's the only one. She still operated under that assumption with both Faith and Kendra (and in her rather disasterous leadership attempts with the potentials, for that matter). I love her, but she can be self-absorbed! Interested to see her work out her place.

Know this was primarily a transition chapter here, but nice glimmers of Buffy's personality in the action.

The dialogue in both flashbacks was really fantastic here: snappy and true to the characters. "I could goout and sleep with lots of guys." "Then I wouldn't tell Giles about that." Cracked me up! And I'm so glad there was a goodbye with Dawn, characteristically short on the mushy. I've actually come to appreciate Dawn's character, though I initially rebelled like most. Anyway, really fantastic movement through dialogue here!

Buffy and Willow do have their issues, don't they? It's really things that are ingrained in both of their personalities: some martyrdom in Buffy, some residual insecurity in Willow. I think you might be able to get away with a little less verbalization between the two of them of this. It's always a fine line in a third-person narrative...figuring out how to make external the inner workings of their minds. I actually think some of your more clipped bits of dialogue are able to do this pretty effectively. Or even short runs inside their thoughts, like the line "I'm angry. How'd I get so angry?" That's evocative...really good!

And Buffy's fairly perceptive here about Willow's feelings. A symptom of her heightened senses?

Thanks again...enjoying this!

Ah, but I actually think you have Buffy fairly well in character here. It is classic Buffy to have something going on with her and to attempt to deal with it herself (particularly in this late season), for better or for worse. And even the little outburst there fits with Buffy's previous snaps, after she has reached the breaking point from some drama or another (and this would qualify). Personally, I happen to think the tension between her and the rest of the Scoobies is interesting, and interestingly complicated, since there have been both good reasons for her actions and for the Scoobies' throughout.

And I particularly love the notion of Buffy both Super Slayer and out of control because of it. I always did find her the most intriguing (and appealing) when she's trying to deal with the killer side of her. My only quibble with the chapter would be that the explanation for how she came to be all Slayer + would be that it seemed a little too pat, a little too much exposition, rather than showing (especially given that explanations are usually not Buffy's realm). But, perhaps you're getting past some early information in order to move more quickly to the action.

Onward...