yes, you've succeeded. That was awsome! Really great scene, I hope you do add a chapter of what happened to Yzak.

OMG!! YES YES!! What happened to Yzak?! Eek! That was HOT HOT HOT!! I LOVED it! Well done! Amazing hotness and Dearka is SUCH a wonderful character and I loved him being uke! Does Mello have blue eyes? I haven't gotten very far in Death Note (got sidetracked...) so I don't know about that. I do know what Mello looks like vaguely and who was the other guy? Matt? Oh PLEASE write what happened with Yzak! I bet it's AWESOME!

You know something? It’s really kind of hard to give a good review when I keep getting distracted by your awesome skills as an author! Your descriptions leave my mind lost in fangirl-land. =^^= You should see me now--clutching my can of X-Treme Pringles in one hand, the computer mouse in the other, eyes intently scanning the contents of The Masquerade like it’s the most interesting TV show *coughpornocough* I’ve ever seen. Like a kid at Christmas… *grins* But on to the review (what's left of it):

“…free to have his mind, among other things, blown.” This line was so awesome I think I cried a little… (like I said, you have reduced me to a pile of fangirl mush that is currently almost useless as a reviewer… -.- *sigh*)

“reduced to a squirming pile of melted Yzak-drooling jelly” Hey! You did a better job of describing my own dilemma than I did. =)

“before even he broke” Yeah, Dearka is kinda badass like that… *shudder* They’re both too delicious to think about for longer than ten minutes at a time… I think my brain might explode otherwise… Oo I think it might explode anyway… I’m reading this at 2:24 in the morning, which is pretty much the equivalent.

Wah! He wasn't Yzak?! oO; Woah… HOLY SHIT! That was trippin’. Where is the abundance of reviews? That finale was beyond MY wildest dreams, and being as strange as I am, my dreams get pretty wild! XD Fantastically great one-shot. Loved it. And I liked the Death Note characters in it too. They fit well with your plot. (I haven’t watched DeathNote, but I’ve looked at some youtube fanvids, and dude, they are hilarious!)

And yes. I think you’re awesome. =D

~;~Shaku
(Lizz)

P.S. Please don’t forget about/forever hiatus The Tennis Match! It is simply too marvelous to kill!

(And I totally agree with you about Yzak and his amazing self-preservation/appreciation skill. *ponders for a moment* I’m seriously loving all these new canon view points. I think I may finally be getting over the fangirl syndrome that holds back my true potential as a writer. …Another reason I brought him up as being possibly suicidal is because my sister and I always have certain characters from every anime we watch who we think likes to bleed… Yzak just so happens to be the one from Gundam SEED. =P Completely just a twisted, fan-based obsession, and only cause it’s what I’m used to. Come to think of it, you’re right--Fllay’s the only one I can think of who might honestly try something so crazy… Huh. Umm.. I guess it’s too late to tell you to disregard this entire review if you don’t like my fangirl rantings, ne? LOL. ^^ I would read&review more of your stuff, but by the time I finish this review, it will be 3:00 in the morning, and I have to work tomorrow—er, today…) MUCHOS KUDOS. -^.^- I loved this one!

*sighs* he's right Yzak.. they were onLy taLking.. -_-

Ooh.. jeaLous Yzak.. XD

*gawks* tha-that.. that wasn't Yzak?! *faLLs over*

I knew those vampires were suspicious! O_O

nyWeiZ, *fans herseLf* hot! >.< suteki! xure hope to read Yzak's part of the story.. I wonder what Matt did to him.. hmm.. jaa ne! ;3

So, FIRST OFF, I absolutely adore your description of the ballroom. I can actually SEE it and AUGH I love masquerade balls. And in every masquerade ball I have seen EVER, there is always a golden aura about it. And you captured that perfectly. Seriously, I was grinning like an idiot. XD

YOU HAVE MATT AND MELLO IN HERE? I love you. Even if it's short. I still love it.

"--fantastic party full of masked women he would never have to see again." HAHA. So like Dearka...

"Moonlight glittered off the dark leaves, casting everything into shades of grey." Oh, I love imagery. :3 Especially pretty imagery, and that is very pretty.

--it would leave him free to have his mind, among other things, blown." Hehe... You made me grin like an idiot again.

OH MY DEAR LORD YOU DIDN'T. NO... YOU DID. XD Oh, my god. My dear, I say you totally succeeded. It was really hot and seriously, that... wow. -is speechless- Funny! X3 Yzak and Mello really are too similar for their own good. I was wondering why Yzak wasn't saying anything at the beginning of that scene. Gah. You got me.

I think you should add a second chapter. Because, really, I can completely GUESS what happened, but I'd like to see it written!

Par 4 paragraph 3 line 2:is it 'Here' or 'Her'? Sorry. Jz saw that.
Dearka must be having quite a good time ^^ thou I'm not quite sure if it's me or Dearka who's more shocked to know that the person just now is not Yzak,but since I had some guessings... ^0^
Thou I am curious,what happened to Yzak...