heart.angel.93


Nice little chapter. Nicely written, has some suspense and emotion and drama.

YOu did great discribing Sam and the mystery voice.


But there was something I had trouble understanding. Was it a dream (resulting from Sam's personal thoughts and emotions), or something else?
Suggestion (not an order), next type, use more detail on the background and discrib what's going on better.

This is what I think of the wholesome standards.

The langauge is clean.
Nothing is suggestively offensive.
No extreme violence or any other vile content.

I hope this review has a good influence on you. God bless.


Data Seeker

Haven't read it yet, but I'm sure when I do it will be awesome!
TP

this was so cool! i admire your writing technique, this story was AMAZING!

Oh my GOD!


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That was AMAZING! :D:D::D You're such a good writer, you should totally write more fics for TS! :D:D:D

I love the last line too, oh my god. It just ADDED to the wonderful drama and suspense and just... wow.

WOW.

Please do write more! I can't wait for them! This is so dark and rich and full of obsession and it was amazingly done.

Please write more.

Love,
Ivy

that was very beautiful heart.angel So thrilling and dark. this is very good. Awesome story

please write more soon.

-Bloodyren

Oh, WOW! I loved it, nice one! For a first Totally Spies fic that was... WOW! I adored it, I hope you do others like this, XD.

I gasped at the last words...

“Do you hear me Samantha? I will have you.”

That was brilliant, please do write more like this, I can't wait, XD

Evily,
Omen