I liked this one too. You wrote it well.

Aslan's Blessings,
Fierce Queen

That was very well written.

I had always wondered why Helen didn't confront her children about their changes, but if she feels as though they are Kings and Queens around her as well, then that would explain it. Nice job!

Wow, this is good. I'm glad you wrote from the mother's POV, it's not something you see too much. And I loved how you wrote, "they never said, not once, “Let’s go home.” It was always, “Let’s go,” or “Can we go?” or “Let’s go back.” They never used home." That's perfect. Thanks for sharing this.

Rolletti

Fantastic last line! Good job.

ok. that was pure awesomeness.

i don't know why i like it, but i do and i like it a lot. Great job!

once a king or queen of narnia, always a king or queen. how fitting. great job. i loved to see how their mother must of thought/saw.

I'm reviewing you fic. WOW! So, like always, it was very good. It was unusual too, I could never think of something like that. The poor Mom xD

very interesting

I loved this story. You show brilliantly how the Pevensies felt after their return, how they cling to memories of Narnia as home, how they trust Aslan, and also how hard it must be for their mother. You write beautifully! I love the wording.

I really liked this - great job!

I liked this. Thanks for posting.
hpswst101

I love this idea. And the way you wrote it was incredibly powerful, and completely in-character for all of the Pevensies. And I love the last line...there's nothing I can say to describe it. Wonderful job.

Luv,
Miss Pookamonga ;-P

Very clever! They all stayed really in character, and the conversation was hiralious to think about it through their mother's eyes.

This is a really cool story; we hear all about how the kids have changed, but we don't really give a lot of coverage to how they seem to other people. And their mom was a perfect person to give a voice to this change. It would be really interesting to explore how Peter (who's lead troops in Battle) and his Dad get along now, since both have seen war and Peter can't exactly talk about it.

The image that really stuck with me from this story was when Mrs. Pevensie said that her children behaved like parliamentarians who had seen too much of war; I thought that was a great way to describe the change. Amazing job with this piece!