Two things really bothered me in this chapter. The conversation Hermione overheard was too convenient and a little forced. I doubt Dumbledore goes over all those manipulations every time he has a conversation with the Grangers. The second thing is when Percy told Harry where they were. He specifically told him they were in one of Malfoy's houses in Bulgaria. Harry's reaction should've been horror and surprise that he was in a well-known Death Eater's house after being kidnapped from a house he thought would keep the Death Eaters and Voldemort out. It just doesn't make sense to me why Harry would be so calm and confused about where he was, despite being told bluntly.

PLEASE DON'T KILL REMMY AND SIRI!

(raises eyebrow questioningly)
Um, Dean's a boy.
I thought only girls could get pregnant.

Brilliant!

Just wanted to mention in an earlier chapter you say Lucius took his animagi for to save Nevilles mother. However in this chapter you say Lucius was never able to take his form. I LOVE this story :)

Enjoyed your story. The whole Neville vs Tom and Harry/Luke vs Alus was great. But I would like to reiterate as I said in a previous chapter review I really would like to strongly suggest you add some additional warnings such as chan, rape and incest. Very very mature themes so readers be warned if you check these reviews first. Well written story though just the same. Loved the epilogue .

hmmm interesting story so far! soooo much OOCness . Anyhow - normally I wait til the end to review but wanted to add a recommendation that you add some additional warnings. I know it's already rated M and you've listed child abuse and an evil Dumbledore but the quantity and detail of the rapes may be disconcerting to readers and it might be prudent to add some extra warnings about it.

Hey love the story i just have one qestion you stated in this chapter that no one else in the manor had animagus forms and that Severus and Lucius had taken the potion but either didnt have forms or didnt achieve them if thats so then how was Lucius able to take the form of a hawk when he, Rodolphus and Tonks went and rescued Alice from Dumbledore?

I'm sure some ones probaly told you this, but you have already given Lucius a animagus form. I would sugest makeing the snake his second form and saying that Severus and Lucius were in the lucky 10% that could change. That is if you want to fix it.

I got so wraped up in your story, my family got a little mad as i started yelling at Albus for being a pedofile and crying at some points. You're writing brought many emotios out and I have to tell you Brilliant. You are a Briliant writer, and if this is what you write for fan fiction I would love to see what you wrote for a story of your own.

I loved the action, and the story line it was rather unexpected at times.

Thank you

Alys x.

loved this story well done

Sorry to be a ninny but the end of this chapter is wrong. Earlier in the story,when Lucius saved Alice, he turned into a Hawk animagi form to get in the house and save her. You said (4th paragraph from the end) "There were no other animagi in the house. Severus and Lucius had both taken the potions and though they found their forms, they had never succeeded."

Intersting turn on things. First time reading it.

please continue

a very long fic - sweet ending.

harry drugged twice over used for blowjobs but not rapes on the side but they are obviously not important enough. wow! i am surprised i have not vomited yet!