In the 3rd chapter, you could do with some showing more than telling, but otherwise, the story was good. The concept is good, and the characterization seems fine.

well I'm not sure about this fiction.
Yuki and Momiji are too strange together,and Akito is always caught when she had sex...
I wonder who is the father

Aw Momiji got some loving! Now if only Akito would suddenly disappear cuz I have a feeling that she's gonna make it hard for them to stay as close together as they've been. *smirks*

Cool story so far!

And then Hatori walks out shaking his head muttering about hormonal gods that can't seem to stay out of the pants of guys.

Then he procedes to call Maury for a paternity test and makes sure that the host has more bodyguards then normal (since he figures that the Sohma family would be a wonderful reason for extra protection).

Meanwhile, Saku gathers popcorn and snuggles with Kyo on one side and Haru on the other to watch the show, making sure to record it for continuing entertainment.

Ok but seriously, I love this story. It should be fun to see Yuki's reaction. Oh and Momiji! He doesn't know yet. Poor kid.

Ah you know what is gonna be a real problem! The whole dreaded Pregnancy hormones! I mean when you're pregnant you become hormonal- cry suddenly, yell, like that. And Akito doing that...Aw man I think Hatori might want to leave. (I'll be glad to take him!)

Anyways wonderful story and I can't wait to see what you do next!!

~Saku~

I hope Akito will be the men eater even as pregnant.
Yuki/Momiji is odd.
more lemon,please

this is how I like Aki-chan,a vamp.
keep writing this good!

Loving the story so far.
There pairings are great, there aren't many writers recantally that have written story's many on akito which i think is a shame because i think she is one of the most interessting charachters.
Can't wait for the next chapter when hatori finds out what the illness is. What will his reaction be or even worse akitos. What i am most looking forward to is the potential fathers views on this. It could be either yuki shigure (as you wrote that yuki caught akito and him) or possibly kureno ( although there is no reference that he could be the father so far).
One more question why yuki/momiji? i don't have a problem with the pairing i just want to now why they are together.
This is a origional story that has great potential
phew well that was a long review ! but there is so much i liked about it :D

Akito's illness...is a boy or a girl?
^-^
can't wait for Shigure/Akito/Kureno action!

Heya there!

Great story so far, like I said last night I can't wait to see just where this story goes. Even though you told me a couple parts, but it should be fun reading it to the end. I'll be waiting for more!

Hmm I read what the other reviewer said about the rating and I looked at it again and I kinda agree, moving it up to M will keep it from being deleted for sure. But that's a minor fix for sure.

*hugs* can't wait to read more!

great story,but the rating is wrong ^-^
M is better!