ok so you did write more chapters- i didnt think you could end with just one. but it was good- honest. i actually want to know what happened. your writing style is believable and interesting. It makes me want to find out more and finish the story. You really know how to create a believable character and i suppose it is because you have no life and all the time in the world to write about this sort of thing :) i only pick on you cuz we've been friends for like 13 years, but i really mean it when i say your writing is always getting better. keep up the good work- ill keep reading when i have time.

-Andrea

Interesting interrpretation of the "actual events" dont know whether or not to agree with you, but since im only reading this one of yours because most of the other ones are about Velvet Goldmine and I wouldnt understand them, it doesnt really seem to matter what the truth really is. but either way- good job. it was cool haw u left it in the open and the whole story wasnt spilled out, though with some more info i may actually be the mildest bit intregued to read another chapter. hehehe. seriously- nice work :)

-Andrea

I am so glad my opinion means something to you... :Þ Wallaby reak that you are... Anyway, I like this chapter. I think I have a new favorite charater: Tommy Stone. Oh, I mean Sergent Thomas Stone. Are you sure this shouldn't be listed under Velvet Goldmine crossover? lolol But it is looking really good. As good as one can be without Christian Bale. And my roommate agrees on that one.

Chrissy

I do not suck hosewater! You suck in general, so nya :Þ. But I do like the new chapter. Finally. But I think Annie should have said "We don't need you! We don't need you! Cuz all those words you said, those were mine." Ok, maybe not, but that's what was going through my head when I read that part. Ok, so now are you ever getting to the end of the story? This is the part in the movie that I always turn it off... and that doesn't go over well for you. So get movin'. LOL

Chrissy

This is such a great story. Really. You're doing a really awesome job. Keep it up!

Ooh, this is good so far. Very realistic. It's not often that you run up on a ff that actually uses the real characters and not the movie-inspired ones. Good job.

Yo, where's the promised updates and conclusion to the story? And where is the freakishly blonde and tall newsie with pervasive b.o.? Jus' wonderin... _ I'm just kidding! (not really... Ivan does have b.o.) But I would like to see the end of the story eventually. I'm sure other people out there would too... I'm sure I could find at least one... _ Anyway, I'm still waiting for that Race and Medda story... or any other newsies stories... no slash! Ugh... Velvet Goldmine... Must go watch Moulin Rouge with so incredibly pure and gorgeous Ewan to clear my mind...

"I don't want you to sleep with him!" ::swoons::

Ok, I'm going away now. Maybe I'll watch Newsies instead, wearing your David hat, which I still have BTW. _

Chrissy

So nice to see an update. _ Anyway, great story. I know the piddly truth details have always gotten to you about the movie, so I guess you had to write the *real* story. _ (truth smuth... we don't need no stinken truth) Anyway, I think you should next write about Race and Medda. But stay away from the Spot stories, I think you have a biased view. But Bumlets stories would be nice... or maybe one about Dutchy. It can be called "Living with b.o." Doesn't that fit? _

Hey

This is good! I 'specially like the line:"I'll take bottle alley and the harbor. You take Central Park, okay?

Those are his usual selling spots." But that's just cause I love the song. Are those really thier names? Where's Mush? Why did Jack have to die? Oh well it is your story and it is probably based on fact so ignore me.Correct me if I'm wrong, bu wasn't Race Italian? (maybe ont in real life, but in the movie he was). I think that this is a good skecleton to the story and a little more detail could be added to some parts (but that's just me, not trying to be mean). Can't wait to see what happens. Title ideas: How it really went down or What really happened or something like that.

Gnat10886

P.S. Check out my stuff when you have time

I LOVE THE NEWSIES!

awesome story! very realistic and intresting!1 i like how you use the old newsies for a real story, it makes it all themore believable! good job! keep it up!

*yael*

oopse...sorry, wrong story...forget that! :-P

P.S...I think you should name it Cat and Mouse

*gasps* What? You've got my name! -I'm- Dot! Ask anybody, ask Cone and Clink, Jewel, Jewels, Goosey, Copper, West, Fiddler, Patch. . .I AM DOT! *realizes she's being an idiot* Er, sorry. I don't really mind there being two of us, especially because now lots of people call me Sundance. . .lol. Anyroad, I haven't read the fic yet, but I noticed that you capitalize and use punctuation, which is always a turn-on for me. So I'll go read it now, and I'm sure it'll be good because the fic of somebody with my name is sure to be good. And I'm sorry for being irrational, hope you're not offended. :)

i love how totally realistic this is. the newsies don't look like they did in the movie, you're using real names, you're using some of the character development from the movie but throwing in some of your own too. this was such a totally original idea that i'm shocked that no one else nabbed up till now. but i'm sure that no one could write it the way that you are. keep up the great work!

awwwww that's just wrong. not right at all. that's awful. horrible cop man.