please write another chapter. please please please!!

Still good, a bit more drama would improve the plot but I sppose if your basing it off a song, it can't be helped. Good luck with the next chapter!!

Love it! obviously! You ended right at the note though, I was just about to read more and then it ends, IT ENDS!! no! otherwise absolutely brilliant, you find yourself almost lost in the story!

Oh Em Gee, she can't just leave him like that! ... Shock.

So what comes next? :)

Arg! I cant believe u just left it like that! update update!! asides from that good chapter not alot happened overall but what did was definately well noted!!

Reaction?

Evil, evil cliffie!
Update soon!

Please write more! Ever since you told me about your idea I have been dying to read it. Better than I thought and trust me I thought it was going to be pretty damn good! Sorry I took so long to R&R by the way.

Hello, darlin'. You know me, it's RabbitohsGirl. We talk on msn...

Anyways, I am not meant to be 'wasting time', but I adore the song you wrote this to, so I just HAD to blow off my stupid assignmnet for this.

The first lines are 'they got married early, never had no money', right?

Can't wait to read the next few bits.

Great job
x

P.S. I changed my name to Paloma Latina, but I can't sign in at the moment.

Interesting so far. :D You're doing well.