"...when I get a hold of him he will face the raft of Finn"

Ummm...do you mean "WRATH of finn"?

that was so cool

Yeah it was awesome i want to read the next bit of the story write more!

Aww!You're finished! NO!I want you to write the next new chapter!PLease!I'm begging you! I want to read the next chapter!Really really really really really really really REALLY! I am such a fan of your writing now! But please,please don't use any foul language.

in the actual show the dark ace was 24 when piper was 14 but I guess that wouldn't work :)

cool keep adding

Jenergy: Hey stay away Dark Ace before i come after you and kick your A-

Grizzly: Easy now... We both know that Me you and Aerrow are going to get him if he goes after o.O Xiaonikki O.o

Jenergy: Right! By the way great story and chapters! Don't stop now and update ASAP! :D

Awsome! I always loved the AcexPiper pair

more please! the way you torture characters is very amusing! (especially Aerrow and Dark Ace (which is two words, you seem to be missing spaces)) :P

yayz! u updated! I LOVE it! Keep up the great work! -

REALLY great chappie!

this definetly was your best chapter! loved it!

lol. still love it! but there were still spelling mistakes

I love this so far! but there were quite a few spelling mistakes. sorry, im not trying to create flames but the spelling wasn't very good

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Nice and loong chap you got there;) hehe.

The only thing I have to say is that - I can see you're from the UK - so I know that you use english all the time. But still I don't think it's right to only wright "U" for you and such things when you're wrighting a story.

Huggles