Smiling, because I recognized dialog from "Hercules".

If you didn't mean to do that, it is an impossible coincidence.

And it works!

I do like Mozira, so this is great!

Thanks for writing it!

This was a wonderful read and a well written story, good job. Your choice of songs from the Prince of Egypt suited each chapter/ scene very nicely and your metaphor about the sun was perfect for the story. All the characters were well written and in character (except for Mozenrath, but as he's lost his memories, it really can't be helped) and your OC's worked very nicely in the story. I was also very interested in your portrayal of Sadira's relationship with Jasmine and Aladdin. It was well thought out and worked well, realistically and plot wise.

The only real issue I had with this is that you seemed to take a bunch of scenes from the Prince of Egypt, and some other movies rather than writing your own. There's nothing really wrong with that, and everything worked nicely, only it takes away from the originality of the story and made it a little predictable.

Otherwise, this is a very well written and thought out piece. I'm also very impressed that you chose to use Sadira and Mozenrath/Tamir as the main characters and the main pairing as very few people would focus on them, or could even make them work as a pairing. But you did and I love you for it, as Sadira/Mozenrath is my favourite OTP!

I hope to see you writing more Sadira/Mozenrath in the future.

Best,

Kara Ashford

I have officially fallen in love with this story, it is so beautiful and heartbreaking. I love how you brought all of the characters together in the end, and how you tied all three stories together. I am so considering the pairing options of Mozenrath and Sadira now, the way you wrote it is just too sweet _.

Once again, I LOVE this story -hugs the computer screen- lol Brilliant work! Makes me wish I could muster up the courage to make my own fanfics (the beginnings are always the hardest You are an amazing writer, this story is so deep and revolves around characters I really like. Your ideas for both Mozenath and Sadira's pasts sound realistic too.

I look forward to any more fanfics from this show, should you make them)

Hey, great ending! I think that's the best song to end on, as well. Plus, the line about the sun being reborn is perfect symbolism and a connection to the previous line. I love your endings!

Everything worked out for the best, and I love those endings! Gives me hope for my own life, at least. You don't have any loose ends, either, so you conclude it very well. Nice work!

Everything is fitting together, and I really like it! For instance, the parents of Nefertari being in the plot and there since the beginning. I liked that part a lot.

There’s plenty of tension when the princess and Aladdin meet Tamir outside. They ought to remember him…Aladdin certainly seems to! And Tamir himself is still recalling some memories of his other life.

You display Aladdin and Jasmine in a style and tone typical of the view of Tamir and Sadira. You even make me not like them so much, and they’re normally the stars! I like that you switch around the viewpoints so well and make the reader think about why they like a certain character. Plus, adding in the warning the couple wants to give to Sadira brings the inevitable closer. Tamir must begin remembering on his own soon…

Things are unraveling differently than I thought. Tamir overheard and believes the past that Aladdin and Jasmine say? I was surprised. It makes it more touching for his selflessness, though.

This was one of my favorite parts for how it made me realize just what Tamir was going through“What was the use of this happier existence if he was only going to remember his old life now?... What was the use of this love and peace he now felt if he was only going to remember the hate and the greed of his past?
Ah, I’m glad Xerxes is back! Oh, and I should have known the shade was Destane. He couldn’t have been gotten rid of so easily before. It all makes sense. Plus, I like how you keep emphasizing Tamir’s self-consciousness with his bone arm, and yet, Sadira doesn’t care.

I love how this concluded with Destane going after the glove. It was just like him to seek the power even at the destruction of himself.

Ooh, tension built nicely by the invitation to the wedding! Plus, I like how there is a reason for the tribe to travel to Agrabah. It makes the story more realistic and flow better.

The line on how there are some questions better left unasked is one of my favorites. It certainly seems true to me!

Aw, the fact that Aladdin let go in the dream turned into a great symbol, meaning even more when Tamir swore he would not let go. Very touching, that was.

I see the connection with the movie at the stealing of the apple. I was waiting for them to see the skeletal hand, and you didn’t disappoint me. Plus, the way the guards recognized him added to the conflict and rising excitement. And if others remember him and help Tamir remember himself, something dreadful will happen…

The naming of the lamb was a great way to show the change in Gabrielle since the last chapter. Plus, it gives more of an example of the way of life there.

I think a little more description of how the magic worked might have added a bit to the story, but I enjoyed seeing how easy it was to use, if not as easy to perfect.

Sadira’s fear of being hurt is still very realistic to me, and I don’t think their friendship and love is moving too fast at all. I feel so sorry for Tamir, who doesn’t know exactly what happened in her past.

Ooh, we get to learn a bit about Nefertari! That adds to her roundness and makes her into a more interesting character.

Nice conflict with how Sadira fears to become attached to anyone again. She certainly has a reason to fear that, and I know that is a true mindset for people. It just makes me long for her to try to open up once more…I bet she does. Well, I hope so, anyway. Those two are so similar, as they’ll find out.

The speech hint on who Tamir might have been is a good one. I like the little hints that are caught by the characters on who he might be, and because I have outside knowledge, I enjoy seeing what they are thinking as I know the truth.

Ah, the little child of the story has arrived! I notice you like to include them. It works to bring out the best in people and show their emotions. Plus, they’re likable!

“Everyone deserves to live.” I like that line as a comeback for all the other times I’ve seen people say they don’t deserve to live. Of course, to work, I’d have to go farther with it, but you’ve started my mind turning, which is always fun for me.

It was amusing when Sadira pulled off the glove. I knew what was underneath, of course, and seeing her reaction made it fun. And Tamir’s own reaction was laughable, too, just because it was his own arm and he had forgotten everything. Great parts.

Another thinking phrase“It’s not like I have anywhere else to go.” It struck me right then how hard it would be if a person had absolutely no memories of him or herself. How fortunate that Tamir was with people who let him in!

Another amusing scene with the dancing. I like the line about how if the two of them went out dancing, it wouldn’t look as bad. I enjoyed how Tamir said that. In fact, I like the two of them bantering throughout.

A very good chapter!

Wow, I see time has passed. You showed that in an easy way immediately by announcing Aladdin and Jasmine’s engagement celebration. Then, you set up the character well even for someone unknowledgeable of the show. This is especially well done in the comparison of Jasmine to Sadira.

This line made me think immediately“Love, I had come to learn, was a privilege reserved only for a special few who earned it.” And, in a way, I know that’s still true here and today. That’s what really caught my attention about it.

The loneliness is set up very well. Already, this story is becoming my favorite of the three mainly for the focus on emotion. Plus, I can connect well to the loneliness idea well and imagine how hard it is for Sadira. The part about how Aladdin and Jasmine aren’t *real* friends hit me well also, for I had been explaining that concept to someone just recently. Plenty of ways you made me thing in this story!

Ah, I see that it was indeed Sadira in the last story I read. Also, I like the changing views from Sadira and Mozenrath in the first person. I am thinking that Sadira trying to steal away Aladdin and Aladdin stopping Mozenrath are elements taken from the show and the rest is mainly made up.

Fasir is a character I love. He’s mysterious and powerful, and I love the conversation about the prophecy he has. I am now very curious about the shadow borne of Mozenrath’s loss of power. I can’t wait to see how this ends up.

That was a fantastic story (along with the two prequels). Thanks!

Beautiful and truly amazing job! The songs all fit perfectly and the emotions and imagery were vivid and powerful not to mention an original storyline and dynamic up the excellent writing!You have lots of talent and a great writing style.

It was a wonderful story! _
I loved it, so cool.

you have a talent! maybe a #2, huh? it would be nice to know how life is after, you know kids, life,Quests! I love the story, Tamir was so sweet, and Sadira was just how I thought she be, and Mosenrath/Tamir is just how i wanted him to be, I hope to read more stories writen by you. BYE)

Awww, how terribly sweet. I've actually always thought the two of them would make a cute couple. [Geesh, I'm so shallow.] You seem to be very hooked on The Prince of Egypt, but that's ok. Overall, a great saga. Everything was very well-thought-out and greatly-executed. Great job; I thoroughly enjoyed it.