I recognize the tune at the end, another brick in the wall...
D.lee 7/12/11 . chapter 53
Wow, this is getting more and more interesting with every new chapter! I hope you'll continue this !
TheDevian 1/16/11 . chapter 19
you said "Nabiki is just WAYYYYY to headstrong to be submissive.(and don't get me wrong, I don't have a problem with the way you are writing her, and it's a funny story) Just wanted to point out that, like you have done here with akane, Submissive people can make the best Dom's and the reverse is also true, someone like Nabiki who is such a control freak could find nothing as erotic as being submissive to another, though she loathe to admit it to anyone, even herself.
I like your portrayal of Kasumi thus far, over all I would say It's Apt. Though technically speaking she is a hair too young to drink legally. (20 is the legal drinking age. driving too, not that they should go together! heh
As someone who is Bipolar I can't see it affecting my sexual preference, but if those tendencies were there, and just repressed... and there is something to be said for anyone who accepts you 'as is'. And Ryoga also had OCD and switching things about your obsession and obsessing on that is common, especially if you mix those two together let me tell you.
someone in a group I am in suggested this story to us, and I am glad, it's been pretty funny so far and I intend to read more of your work when I am done with this one.
Thank you for the skill and creativity you put forth, the only correction I have in general is the Otoku/Otoko thing I think I mentioned in a previous chapter. Otoko is man. Nabiki would be Otoku (economical). and I am Otaku! but that's different...
TheDevian 1/15/11 . chapter 11
just for the record
otoku (n) economical
otokonoko (n) boy; male child; baby boy
otoko (n) man(P)
wow, this fic is really good. only thing I see a problem with is the last chapter, which seems to have some formatting problems and the like. other than that, Great job!
after reading through the whole 53 chapters you have so far, I feel I must convey a congratulations to you. it is difficult to write a story so perverse without going into details. I commend you for it and hope that you may find the inspiration to continue it, as I have had many a good laugh over it.
You know, Ryouga's obsession with Ranma really does seem plausible...I like it. If Ryouga really did act like that, and since he's physically stronger than Ranma I'd love to see him dominate Ranma in both forms!
'sans' means without in French and that's why your sentence didn't make sense.[Kasumi knew that she was next, sans the dozens of apartment guides sitting on the kitchen counter. Kasumi frantically flipped through them, but the more she looked, the more discouraged she became.
You could have used; as a result, for that reason,
accordingly, and so, consequently, ergo, for, forasmuch as, for this reason, hence, inasmuch as, in consequence, in that event, on account of, on the grounds, since, so, then, thence, therefore, thereupon, thus, to that end, whence, wherefore...
Basically you needed an adverb.
Nice story by the way! I'm not flaming you, just helping you. I really like your story.
Could you try and make a Side-Story to this chapter where Ranma-Chan succeds in eating the SuperSoba. Then he has his way with girls and guys from just about every anime that occurs on modern earth, then after that have Ranma go to America for some conquests in the DC/Marvel world. Wonder what Ranma-chan's villainess name would be? Maybe Succubus?
Aw, why'd you stop? I started out just reading it for the interesting title but it's really grown on me. Somehow and you get god status in my book) you managed to string together a bunch of lemons and limes into a coherent and enthralling plot. It's so much fun to read I read it three times. I sincerely look forward to the next chapter.
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