Awww! I like how you added the wedding invitation at the end. A wedding that happened in real life. I'm guessing that the date is the actuall date they got married?

The part where Will is asking "How come she don't want me, Ash?" reminded me of the episode when his father came back and left without him at the end.

Beautifully done, both Will and Ash were captured beautifully.

it is seriously really good and you should start writing it again 'brilliant' (contact me)