It was a great story! I love it! it was a bit sad in the beggining I felt like crying most of the time but its a great work! keep up the fantastic job!!=D

This is really good so far, especially for your first fan fic! I like the ending sentence "Because then they would be arch rivals"
I think the dialogue is a little stilted, but otherwise it's really good! I can't wait to read the next chapter and I love the Harry/Hermione pairing!
~Lucy