GREAT! I really enjoyed the rich description in this piece. The flowers and her hair, the viera sensing the feral love making etc. I'm really glad you captured Basch's POVs and his own insecurities. At first he's like emo emo, her Majesty can never love me and later he is like Ha ha, she wants meh and I cannot resist! XD

Awesome. My only complaint is that your sentences tend to drag on sometimes to do you trying to be descriptive. Eg: The memory of her gentle yet teasing smile plagues his mind, as he remembers how she accused him of wanting this as much as she, and it was so true: it disquiets him how easily she had read his hunger for her before stripping him of his clothes, of his control.

And sentences like that that are long and separated by commas and such, parts of this piece might flow better to the reader if broken up into several sentences. Other than that, I didn't spot any major typos to whine about and I really enjoyed this piece. Nice job. :D

Hi^^

I discover on late your fic I'm sorry :(
Your description of the feelings are amazing, I'm very impressive!
I love how you described Basch and it's true that's a challenge!

And above all, I love your ending, I just hope that Basch would make the good choice! XD

Holy Cow that was soo... WHOA! I love it. This was really cool. And you have applie the theme well. Yeah, now that I think about it... that slap had more tension/angst/anger/lust/passion thing going on. Hahaha. Wow. this is so god! and i love how much of a temptress Ashe is. It somehow reminded me of Cupid and Psyche, in an odd way, except "cupid" is more laid back here. Wow wow wow. You really are something! God. What have I been missing!? You just get better and better. More power!!

I know I'm repeating myself Eari but it has to be said: you have a beautiful way with words. All the way through I just found myself mesmerized by your prose and the way Basch reflected on what had just happened and what was to come. Your first line was catching and your last line was incredibly poigniant, simply because it could feasibly go either way.

Well if you had any concerns about the way that you wrote Basch, I think those fears can well and truly be laid to rest. Basch's doubts and motivations were captured exceptionally well and were in keeping with his character. What is more, I was impressed how you managed to weave this story into a part of the canon. I was a little skeptical at first but your manipulation of canon events made it go off without a hitch.

Ashe also seemed to be quite in character though out of everything I do think her motivations for kissing and then, eh... playing with Basch could've been explored a little more. But considering this is the epilogue, I presume this will be a part of the prologue, which I look forward to reading. Aside from that, I have no criticisms at all.

The feelings in this story are too familiar. My boyfriend he-- I won't bother you with the details, it doesn't matter. The point is, you hit and pulled something out of me that I pushed to the back of my mind, that someone can touch me and torture me that deeply with just a look.

Brilliant job. Please write for Ashe and Basch again.

o.o

WOW

Adorei.

Tadinho, ele tenta tanto resistir...mais vale deixar andar. XP

Gostava de saber o q acontece a seguir na historia. ;P

Lindo, Lindo
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*Melodia*

AW! Thanks for the mention!! And sorry it took me this long to get on here and leave a review!! I loved this fic, it was a different style for you but you did good! There wasn't very much at all that I had to tamper with and still I'm not perfect with that tense either... or all the others :D

(“Follow me,” she whispers, and it does not seem a command, nor a request but an enticement. And into the corridor she vanishes, flying away from his sight.

He stares at the void left by her former presence.

Mind or heart, lead or follow.

One of them spoke louder.)

MY FAVORITE PART!! LOVE IT! Especially the 'Mind or heart, lead or follow', it totally fits Basch and how he would think... at least in my opinion :D

Great job! Looking forward to seeing more from ya!

~*~ Kristi ~*~

*Glares at inbox* What's with not telling me of this fantastic story being uploaded?

Alright...I've read this about five times in a row...I still can't think of anything other to say then. WOW. I was completey mesmerized the whole time, each time too. :D I could picture every little detail in my head with your descriptions. I'm not going to just leave this as a review no...It's much too short for this, I'll go and reread and review as I read for the sixth time. ^_^

"They are wrinkled and still hold warmth beneath his calloused palm, accusing evidence of her former presence at his side-" ...Please, who would want to leave his side, should they get the chance to do that? ;)
"Furthermore, she had seemed most willing to kill him." - Oh, I want to see fight. :D Basch wouldn't even guard and we all know that. ^_^
"it disquiets him how easily she had read his hunger for her before stripping him of his clothes, of his control." - Just imagining Basch's expression when this happened (most likely of surprise and YES! XD) is hilarous to imagine.

*Needs to quit reviewing and imagining the scenes in her head at the same time* ...Just to see Fran's face if it was her bed...XD You should really write that, it would bring tears of laughter to everyone.

"he still feels that she intentionally omitted something in this letter." ...What's wrong Basch? Looking for the time and place of the next meeting. ;P
"She seems relieved; her eyes ask for his aid, she quietly pleads for his support and he is more than willing to do so, but not before casting an intimidating glare and a few warning words to the sky pirate as he passes by." - So, that's why Basch done that to Balthier. :D

*Is currently short-circuiting.* WHY DIDN'T THEY GET YOU TO PUT THIS SCENE IN THE GAME? FJDKAL;GJDKA;FJDIAOGF~ *explodes from the intensity of the scene*
"He realises then what she wants and, alarmingly enough, it is what he wants to, when he watches, helplessly, her left arm falling to her side, hanging off, a silent invitation for him to touch her. Because she is forbidden, he fights to not move and fails: he feels drawn to her as he slightly bends forward on his seat, and his eyes are still locked with hers when his hand reaches silken skin. He takes it into his for a moment, his fingers brushing the back and the balmy palm of her hand, before sliding up the soft texture of her wrist and inner arm.
Then he stops midway, not because he wants to, not because she commands him to, but because her upper arm protections stood in the way.
Unexpectedly, and without a word, she leaves his touch, she leaves him mesmerised, and turns forward on her seat again. Yet soon enough he catches the metallic clink of her seatbelt being unclasped - and those memories resurface again - and gets up on her feet. And no one but him notices the crimson hue that has emerged to her cheeks – and the heat to his own neck – as she excuses herself, before motioning outwards from the cockpit. "

"She says she needs fresh air; he realises he needs a cold shower." XD! *cannot stop laughing.* That was so unexpected and is perfect. :D

"One of them spoke louder." Go Basch, follow the princess so Earisu can write more scenes that mesmerize me. :D

I hope one day, I can get to writing as well as you do, but that will take some time to get to, you put the standard pretty high up. ^_^ Defintinly a favorite. Can't wait to read the beginning part of it.
Hugs,
Akeri

Gasp!

Hey I didn't get a notification that you posted this!...*glares at email inbox*

OK this was a cool way to read your story, I was laying out in the sun, so I printed this out and read it slowly, pausing between paragraphs to mull everything over.

This was stunning, beautiful, emotional...sexy (fangirl squeal...ahem)

Beautiful, poetic descriptions... oh, the sensations left by her hair her hair.. I almost feel as if I am Basch, with all his inner thoughts intermixing with the experiences of his outer body.

"Her scent, her taste, had tantalised him and he now misses it. With his mouth closed, he runs his tongue across his lower lip: it is still lingering there, her alluring, enticing flavour, and he tries to grasp more of it. His fingers stir as they recall the velvet touch of her pale, flawless skin, and the strong pounding of her heart rippling her skin beneath his fingers and her mouth, racing as fast as his own."

Gah!

Heheeh... oh, Fran will so know they did the deed in her bed. :D

So sweet! She is still on the same ship as him, she didn't leave or anything...but she leaves him a little note on the pillow.

The part where he can resist her invitation to touch her hand is my fave. You write Basch so well.

"He straightens on his seat and tries to concentrate on the outside view, on the instrumental panel, on the exchange between pilot and navigator, on the chat between the kids, on anything but her, and again, he fails."

Hahahha! I love how worried he gets around her.

Love the ending too! I know which one he chooses!

I hung on every word of this story... and now, I have read it 3 times... *lol!*

Straight into favorites it goes: click

~Famke~

Oh EARI! :) X Little sis!

This is certainly nothing to be ashamed of! It's everything I knew it would be! Gripping, sexy and so beautiful! You have written Basch VERY well! He is certainly struggling within, but I'm pleased his heart won out in the end! Your words are spot on and you haven't lost your touch! XD

I want to read the first part now!

(sorry it's not a long post...it's almost beddie byies. But oh what a vision to have in my head when I go to sleep!! XD)

Whoa, Earisu that was lovely! So worth the wait! :D The words are just...I don't know XD (IM TAKING NOTES, YOU TALENTED PEOPLE) and love Basch's POV, you did great! Though the best part was the end how Ashe left with that teasing little whisper. You evil, evil woman XD hee!

The part that made me laugh most was when Basch began to wonder which room they were in and hopefully not Fran's. I was thinking "Oh snap!" LOL

*fangirl squeal*

This was really good! I LOVED IT! The descriptions! The present tense which you don't see very often! And you slotted it in nicely too!

"Penelo, Vaan’s girlfriend he thinks" Basch is right!

I look forward to the Prologu =D

~Feeny