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Reviews for: Sparks Fly
Kid
2008-07-20 . chapter 1
very enjoyable little read Tsona, but I really think that John should have buried the wand. The wand seems to be working as a wish granter, which is very different than how a wand usually works even for a wizard, it seems to be doing this in an act of self preservation so it works. However, it doesn't seem fair that the wand would continue to simply grant a muggle's every request. Especially when it is extremely damaged, but if he buried it by his house it seems reasonable that some of the luck or magic of the unicorn hair might rub off onto his home and family.
As far as grammar goes I think "Nathan Wright had servants even" sounds fairly awkward. I'd wright it as "Nathan Wright even had servants," or some such thing.
potterrules92
2008-07-02 . chapter 1
lol, funny, i liked it, good story! btw do you think you could stop by my story and read and review? thx! :D
MeakoXIII
2008-06-27 . chapter 1
I really liked it. It was fun and different, which added to its charm.
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