...that is an absolutely horrible thing to do to a person, leaving it off like that! In any case, I add my support should you decide to finish this -- you have wonderful characterization and an excellent writing style. Rinoa can be written very badly, but you managed to capture her charm and determination.

hm...I actually like this. Not many "How Squall became Leon" kinda stories out here...from what I can take from this, it appears that way.

Very action/adventure in this chapter. LOVE the style; the run-on sentences make it all intense (as running from the Heartless should be). ^_^

Personally, I would like to see how you run with this. But if not, it was good writing regardless.