And it hasn't dawned on Diego or Victoria that a wedding performed by a ship's captain is LEGAL? Ho boy!

I'm glad that you updated this. I hope to read more.

Whew! My curiousty is climbing! Whatever could be in that trunk, and how in the world will they open it?!?!
After this chapter, I think the alcalde is De Soto, because he is the one who had the poor family.
Great job! Please keep it up; I can hardly wait for the rest of the story!

Wonderful start to a story. Please finish it for us poor folk left wanting more ! :)

This is really Really REALLY good... please write more.

"I reckon it's more stable"? snicker!!

Hello,
I decided to read your story again from the start to be able to give you more feedback and constructive criticism, in a more structured manner (as more chapters make it easier to make up my mind about it).

In the first chapters, you did not waste time getting into the action, but I feel it gets thrown at us readers in a somewhat disorderly fashion. Without being required, I think your first chapter could use a more "thought through" setup, for example, you could describe more how the characters feel, describe a little the pueblo, the temperature, what Diego was thinking while he was riding home with the bull, etc. These little details, added between the dialogues, would greatly add to the atmosphere, and contribute to making the characters more three dimensional... and I would even be tempted at this point to make a short scene from the pirates' point of view, like something mysterious is about to happen, prior to the pirates kidnapping Diego and Victoria. Suggestions, of course :)

Also, the idea that Diego makes the pirates believe Victoria is his wife is interesting and has a lot of potential, but I would be curious to know a little more about what made Diego think this in the first place (describe in more details how he came to that idea).

I see you are trying to make the situation evolve into numerous awkward moments for our two heroes, due to their proximity and the lie Diego made, but again, I would seriously consider adding material to key scenes in your story like the storm and how Diego climbed up there in the crow's nest. This has obviously a good impact on how he is perceived by the pirates on the ship, and I'm sure it wouldn't hurt to give him a more lengthy shining moment :)

Continue ton bon travail :)

omg they kissed?! and she didn't recognize him!! what next what next

Yay, a new Zorro story. :) Nice beginning, can't wait to see what will happen.

Unfortunate for Diego and Victoria to be caught in a standoff between pirates. Promises to be an interesting story

Yay a new Zorro story!
This is an interesting premise, now that everyone thinks Diego and Victoria are married, will they have to prove something to the crowd and kiss each other? Would Victoria recognize Diego as Zorro? Ah, I am getting ahead of myself, ahah. Forgive me!

I am guessing the Alcalde is Ramon, he's got a beard. Right?

I wonder if your story will happen on the sea or if Diego will find a way out before they reach the ship.

Also, I know I am a little picky about this kind of stuff called "point of view", but it is always something I notice, when POV change too quickly between characters :) You will have to forgive me if I suggest to stick to Diego's POV, or just make one switch to Ramon's POV once he gets to the pueblo.

Hoping to see chapter 2 soon!

Excellent beginning! Diego has quite a dilemma on his hands, doesn't he? How to save himself and Victoria without letting her know he's Zorro.

And I can only hope there will be an interesting conversation between them about his claim that she is his wife?

Grammar Alert - The words 'don' and 'senorita' should be capitalized when used in front of someone's name, like Don Alejandro or Senorita Escalante or even Senorita Victoria.

Another thought, maybe I wasn't paying close enough attention, but what alcalde are you using? He sounds like Ramone.