Nice work. This is going on my favorites list,

I though this was very poetic. And and a lot of imagery. I especially liked the part about the fruit cups. But, I think there needed to be a little more about what drove them apart. Other than that it was beautfil, just like all your work. Keep it up.

Cristykay

kewt story! i like how you make the couple angsty bickering at first then lovey couldn't-stop-ravsish-you by the end of the fic. although there are some lines thats on the verge of making either takaya and naoe out of character. and i think its more correct if Miya calls Naoe as "naoe-san" rather than naoe-kun. the "-kun" is more suitably used when an older person addressed a younger man. and since miya is waay younger than naoe, she should address him with the "-san". there are a few things in the fic that needs polishing or corrections but overall its good already.

cute. romantic. angsty. i luved it.

That was so bittersweet! To actually have Naoe & Kagetora, I mean Takaya so happily together for once.