Yay for Pride!
It's a good story, but (I have to be honest) the punctuation sucks. Hard to read like that.

Hope you're better by now.

Much love,

Gryph.

Funny, I was listening to Leave Out All The Rest by Linkin Park as I read this. I like the general idea and most of the writing, especially the line“Aren’t you going to help him? That Keigo kid said “you’re his friend right?” If only he knew.
I also thought this episode hinted toward a deeper relationship between those two, at least on Yumichika's side, so it's nice to get a narration of his thoughts. The writing is a little awkward in places, missing commas and the like, but that's okay.

I also love your dedication! What a great idea, a yaoi fic in honor of Pride. Gives me ideas, especially since I missed my Pride this year as well *sad face*.

Anyway, good fic, keep writing.

P.S.

Odd, and now Lacrymosa comes up on the playlist. I think Windows Media Player is responding to your musical inspiration. Maybe it's prompting me to write more yaoi. . . .)