L-U-N-G-E, not "lung." Drives. Me. Crazy.

I am totally loving this story, but I do wish your spelling, grammar and punctuation were better, so that I don't have to spend many moments trying to figure out what you're trying to tell me...

Hi, i loved this story it was awesome! Are you making a sequel? I'm really dying to know what happens after their marriage?

I loved it. just like i love all you stories.

did he just say would you like to sleep with me this night?

I cried like a baby during this. Fantastic! Loved it!

Interesting, I'll give you that. I like however I feel like you rushed the ending. Sarah never showed any suspicion of Margo until the very end. You should have had her show tell-tell signs of it throughout the fic. Also, she accepts Jareth's help too easy (Toby too). From what I gathered, she never expected Jareth to be Master Dianann so there's no real reason for her to accept Jareth. And what's with Linda getting with Keegahn? First she tries to beat him off with a bat and next they're getting hitched.

Other than the grammar, spelling, and word misusage-which needs fixed badly-it's a bit blurred in some areas and that needs to be fixed too. Oh and when you use French (most, such as myself, are French-illiterate), add a mini-dictionary at the end so readers don't have to stop and look it up; ruins the flow.

Interesting but extremely poorly written. You had spelling errors, grammar errors, and word misusage. It is very painful to follow. All the different scenes all mesh together. I have to reread it and sometimes pause to figure out who's where, who's doing what and/or whom, among other things. All in all, GET A BETA! Or go back and edit. There's no excuse why this has the spelling and grammar of a 6 yr old.

This is one of the best Labyrinth fanfics out there! You're a great storyteller and I enjoyed your story so much. Thank you for sharing this with us!

YAYYYYY! I really ADORED this story. Even though there was no smut. (Why is it so hard to find a Labyrinth story with smut?)

this was an amazing rollar coaster story

Very good story I wish it had a sequel!

Truly a brilliant story...although I don't think Linda honestly deserved her happy ending. xD Truly, I disliked her from the start. But that's what made you a brilliant writer...it was so easy to love and hate your characters.

I haven't read all your stories on the Labyrinth, but so far this is one of my top favorites!

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