Hey there!

I just wanted to let you know I absolutely adored your stories, both The Downside and the Upside. I'm trying to find "Equilibrium", which you mention in this prologue -of sorts- but I haven't had any luck. Have you published it?

Only one note on the spanish phrases you try to use... I'm argentinian. If you feel up to modifying a couple of the chapters, I'm pretty sure I can give you the correct spanish translations you were striving for. :D

For example... you used "Venido, Amable" for "Come, Amable". But "venido" is the past participle, not the present tense of the verb. It's like saying "have come, Amable", or "is come, Amable". See?

Anyhow, I really, really, really love the way you write! Looking forward to hearing from you!

Its good so far. That dream you were talking about. I might beable to help. Maybe you don't like to be restrained or contained. Your a wild one.

Definitely a different story! I liked it. Thought you did a good job writing Ardeth's character.

Though I'm only on the first chapter, it seems to me that you've really done some research, making the story that more believable. So far, I've enjoyed what I have read, and I do plan on finishing this fic, but here's a quick tip: quotation marks. They're necessary for written dialogue.

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So far, amazing! I reaaly like your portrayal of Ardeth, as I do remember in the first movie when he was so freaking exasperated with Rick and company, so I do think you show that very well. He's not cruel, but he ain't cuddly neither.

I can tell you're a Firefly fan. I love phrases like "overly inclined" that sound like the speech patterns of the main characters in the show. So very nice.

Kudos for the honest attempt at Arabic. I do think it adds to the story.

My only complaint is that you do not use quotations to indicate someone is speaking. This occasionally makes it hard to follow what's happening.

Otherwise, I love it and I'm definitely going to continue reading. Can't promise I'll review each chapter, but I will be reading it.

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I can't wait to read about the upside now.

I really enjoyed this story. I think it's well written, has a good plot and is very culturally interesting. I think you show Ardeth very well and Esther is a really lovely character.

I know that this story was written about 4-5 years ago and has been completed since then (and so far I'm liking it) except I just want to comment on one itty bitty thing I've noticed. I'm not sure if they've been added in in later chapters (I've noticed that if I comment on it, it's usually corrected in the later chapters rather than the current ones... but there are no quotation marks when they speak. Due to the lack of quotation marks, I'm afraid it takes away a little from the story (that's just one of my pet peeves I'm sorry T_T I have to go back and re-read what I read because I couldn't differentiate between the dialogue and the rest of the story... Uh just wanted to point that out _ But I'm going to continue reading and if that was already corrected in later chapters then I apologize for the suggested correction of the early chapters. And if you don't want to bother with fixing that, I understand. _

At first when I read the short summary of this story I passed over it an ignored it, and continued to ignore it for the next week or so. This morning I decided to take a chance and read the first chapter. It was your prolouge and author's notes and I have never seen someone put so much effort and care into their story. I read an Ardeth story last week who's plot was blown way out of proportion with rediculous things such as katanas. I thought "i really wish someone would write a story that made sence and was mature and believable" You answered my fanfiction prayers! So far your story is really really good. Like, probobly the best I have read, no kidding. XD! Oh, I was looking for quotation marks but if they aren't your thing, thats fine, you made it easy enough to figure out. My email is blue.. I don't have a login so yeah, if you want to contact me at all... Now then, back to my reading! I can't thank you enough for the excellent read. Finally somebody gets it.)

I think that is probably a good way to end this part of the story though I wouldn't mind reading the other half (I am a little reluctant to start, because I don't think it's been updated in a while). I really appreciated the way Ardeth handled the whole thing. Thanks for a good story!

Oh, interesting twist. I still feel very sorry for Ardeth though. Thanks!

Wow, poor Ardeth. She doesn't seem to think that he might be hurt by this. I wonder why she thinks that she could stand to have Sahir touch her? Good job!

I am not *quite* sure what you were going for with the dream there. I mean obviously, she feels like her old life is irrevocably gone, fears she is dishonored, and still wants nothing to do with marriage, but I'm still not quite sure. Good job though!

Wow, good for him. I can see that she still has some way to go. But at least she wasn't actually raped then it would take even longer. Good job!