It has a good beginning, but some stories just go downhill from there. Yours isn't one of them :D

Whoo, this sounds interesting! =)
I can't wait for what's next! Good job bubby!

omg u sud continue, the storys so interesting

Aw, that's cool! I like it! Very well written! Sneak peek please! C: Update soon!

It sounds really cute. Sasuke as a hot blooded male. I can just see it happening but it seems to fit hi somehow. Please update soon! I'll be looking forward to it! :D

~ ♥Tsuki-chan

ha. i love it. :]
i love they way you write.
the freeze frame is great.

Great story. The writing, the characterisation has made this story a pleasure to read.
Ususally I don't like this format. It's not that this format is horrible, quite the opposite. When written well, like in this work of fanfiction, it can be humourous and wonderfully amusing. It's just, after years of surfing , looking for fiction of quality, you tend to notice that this format, with its use of singular words to portray action and its ability to move the story with lightning speed, tends to used and abused by pre-pubesent.
It works in this, though, it really does. Humor-wise, it's enjoyable. Not the funniest thing that I have read in my lifetime, but it amused me all the same
You've managed to keep Sasuke in character as well. That's a big tick in the box. Most of the romance stories I read have Sasuke turning into rutting dog idiot the moment he realises that Sakura is remotely desireable, and to be able to keep the smuttiness and the icy-coldness of Sasuke's character at the same time prove your skills as a writer.
I'm glad that you posted this link on the sasukeXsakura lj community, it's just made my day.

Hey! Just wanted to say wow. Great job for your first Naruto fanfic! For serious!

Usually when people write fanfics about a Sasuke/Sakura mission, they make it sound serious with slight hints of very bad humour. But I like your approach! It's original, and it makes me laugh. You're very inventive and I like the way you make the narrative flow--with the freeze frames and the internal thoughts of the characters--and Sasuke seems very IC for this type of narrative, too. Of course he would be thinking such things about Tsunade and Sakura! Haha.

And oh, Sasuke and Sakura getting it on? Yes, Sasuke is most definitely just your average male--who seems to like hitting things when aggravated. Haha. I love how things are shaping up! The only thing I would suggest you work on is perhaps proof-reading it before you post, because I noticed a few grammatical errors. Nothing big, but I am basically a grammar **, so it's like my duty to be all anal and point it out. Doesn't detract from the awesome story, though!

I'll be anticipating the next update! Great job!

xoxo isis

OH PLEASE CONTINUE IT!
I CANT WAIT!

keep writing =]

Hey! Love the story! I am now curious but i think that'll be solved in good time. Anyways great story! I can't wait for the update!

Yea, I like it. Continue please.


Maybe Naruto could go ask Sakura now and find out that he was better off handling teme!

nice:) haha. sasukes always mad or somber. wait. sasuke had sex with NARUTO?!dude. thats messed up?

Good story so far, you caught my interest. Can't wait to see how the mission went with Sakura

This makes me curios! Anyways, it's good for a story so far! I would like to see a new chapter soon!