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very good. its well done and is in the style of a Bewitched episode. again well done.

Hehehe... Cute story. I hope you update real soon.

this is a great story i love bewitched its really great better than tv shows today i think.

you have to continue this awsome awsome story its so great i love it. dont leave everyone in suspense

great job

brilliant!

It's very good! You have the characters down pat, and I can definatley imagine this being an episode!

I loved it! you got the characters perfect and everything!

I really like our story because it is alot like the episodes. But that's a good thing...I think. Anyhoo I don't really mind the spelling errors because I make them myself. _ Please write another chapter because I want to know what happens.

i luved this story i think i luved it because i luv the tv show like most but i thuoght it was really good

Pretty good. I too have a disgust for long range teleports. Please add another chapter/Act

Write More! Write More!

People always pick on fan fic writers about their paragraphs, don't let it bother you. The way to stop it is to add an extra return between each line of dialogue and every paragraph. Or, the simpler way, save the story to your computer first as a Word document and then as a Web Page or HTML document. You can do that in your save as menu.

I'm not sure why, but your storyline reminds me vaguely of an episode of the show... I just can't remember which one. Anyway, you should continue, I'd like to see what you've got planned next. Good job.

This story was interesting and realistic. I enjoyes reading it and I think you should write more about Tabatha.

I like it interesting!

Question: how old is tabithia now ?

This is a great start, did you ever finish it? Please let me know where the ending is, it will drive me crazy until then.

And oh yeah to echo someone else, paragraphs are really really our friends.