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no name
2009-03-29 . chapter 1
I like it!! Poor sakura!
LaurieLover
2008-12-18 . chapter 1
i like your description of the pizza.
just kidding. i'm sure someone else has made that joke before me, but i couldnt resist.

this is good! the last line pulls it together very nicely. i suggest, though, that you try formatting your drabbles differently, because like it is now it looks rather squished at the bottom of the page
but overall nice job!
B_L_A_H
2008-07-05 . chapter 1
Honestly? This was kinda pointless (Only KINDA, didn't say total), and it was annoying how your authors note was nearly as long as the actual drabble.. =/
WitheredWings
2008-07-04 . chapter 1
I like it, though it is a bit short. Maybe you should make the climax more.. climax-like. Only thing I can comment on:) But keep on writing, Spread the love!
cast14
2008-07-03 . chapter 1
great story
cts
freak a geek
2008-07-03 . chapter 1
Short and sweet...

All I could say was

HELL YES!

SasuNaru XD
mielioschalana
2008-07-03 . chapter 1
Okay I am reviewing. *hides from all nearby projectiles that skybluebutterfly could throw her way* Sorry about not reviewing often. *bows in apology*

I enjoyed how you made such a short story so descriptive and yet still contain a plot. One phrase however stuck out to me as slightly awkward: "arranged the papers to one arm". When writing a shorter piece everything has to flow or else it will make the reader focus upon it.
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