 no name 2009-03-29 . chapter 1 I like it!! Poor sakura! |
 LaurieLover 2008-12-18 . chapter 1i like your description of the pizza.
just kidding. i'm sure someone else has made that joke before me, but i couldnt resist.
this is good! the last line pulls it together very nicely. i suggest, though, that you try formatting your drabbles differently, because like it is now it looks rather squished at the bottom of the page
but overall nice job! |
 B_L_A_H 2008-07-05 . chapter 1 Honestly? This was kinda pointless (Only KINDA, didn't say total), and it was annoying how your authors note was nearly as long as the actual drabble.. =/ |
 WitheredWings 2008-07-04 . chapter 1I like it, though it is a bit short. Maybe you should make the climax more.. climax-like. Only thing I can comment on:) But keep on writing, Spread the love! |
 cast14 2008-07-03 . chapter 1great story
cts |
 freak a geek 2008-07-03 . chapter 1Short and sweet...
All I could say was
HELL YES!
SasuNaru XD |
 mielioschalana 2008-07-03 . chapter 1Okay I am reviewing. *hides from all nearby projectiles that skybluebutterfly could throw her way* Sorry about not reviewing often. *bows in apology*
I enjoyed how you made such a short story so descriptive and yet still contain a plot. One phrase however stuck out to me as slightly awkward: "arranged the papers to one arm". When writing a shorter piece everything has to flow or else it will make the reader focus upon it. |