Oh... I love this, this is beautiful. You're right, there really aren't enough Ariana stories online, but this one is very near perfect. I love the third-person present tense; that fits perfectly with the tone you're creating, and I really like the theme of yellow scattered throughout the fic. One thing I was wondering, though, was what exactly makes Ariana mature enough to be the little bit scared of herself that she is -- she seems to sort of understand her situation at fourteen, and she didn't earlier. But I digress -- fabulous story!

As my name shows, I am a huge Ariana Dumbledore fan. And I love this story. It's great.

Wow.

aw, that's so sad I almost cried.

This was a beautiful story and was written well. I loved the idea you had. It was great in a sad way. Poor Ariana.
You really 'got' her character, you wrote her extremely well and at the end I got a little teary. Well done for writing such a wonderful story :)

OOh, lovely! I adore this one!! I loved how yellow is a good color for her, but it makes bad things happen to her, and she thinks her parents are hiding, and her mouth gets stuck, and how she likes Gellert. Great job, this was slightly pathetic (the fact that Ariana is who she is, I mean) and slightly uplifting. Fantastic! One idea, though--don't put a ' after the shortened names--we don't really need them, and they got in the way of the flow...
But awesome job!!

Awesome :) the colour yellow is a lovely touch. but why do their nicknames all have apostrophes at the end? well-written :)
love, anie.
(ps, if you need help betaing, i'd be glad to be of help, that is if you haven't found anyone already?

Oh, this is just wonderful. I love the way the theme of yellow runs through it, and how perceptive Araina is, even though her mouth gets stuck and she can't explain things. Fabulous story.