Awesome, and so believable.

I really love the way you manage to capture the characters so well. OOC newsies always irk me, but you have done a splendid job keeping them in character and painting a vivid picture with this story. Please update soon!

Love it. Love their conversation, Jack's thought process, everything. More! More!

o burn, jack. yay for updating!

Uughh, brilliant. I am extremely tired and not articulate nor coherent in the least, so all I can say is "uughh, brillant". Moar nao plz

Good lord, Cym, where to start. I think you should know, my initial reaction to that first chapter and specifically this paragraph:

“Even in the low light Jack could see how blue David's eyes were, and he could see that want of something within them. It was somehow on his lips, too, sitting there unspoken. A secret. Mesmerized, Jack rubbed his thumb over David's parted lips and watched its slow progress. He looked up to find David's eyes closed.”

was “That’s ** brilliant”. Seriously. That’s ** brilliant. And I know FFN is going to censor that, so lemme spell it for you. F-U-C-K-I-N-G brilliant. I literally sat back and said it out loud.

And of course, it only got better from there. I LOVE that David is using Spot as a replacement. And maybe Spot is too? That’s sort of unclear right now, but it wouldn’t surprise me because Jack is this golden boy who everyone seems to want, but no one can have because he’s an oblivious self centered **. And I mean that lovingly. But he is so painfully self involved and no one can hate it for him because he doesn’t realize how self involved he is, so it’s almost pathetic, yet charismatic at the same time.

Spot is perfect in this as well. He’s arrogant and hard and completely shut down. He strikes me as the type who really only knows how to feel pain, which has gotta be rough on poor Davey, because I feel like Davey loves so hard and did grow up soft. I am pleased, however, to see him holding his own against Spot, but physically and verbally.

“The ease of Spot's arrogance made it all the uglier.”

Once again, ** brilliant. I need more.

Whew, what a scene. Very hot. I am surprised -- and pleased! -- that such graphic scenes are allowed. I'm loving it. Your interpretation of all three characters are spot-on. I'm really looking forward to more.

So good! You are amazing at creating such tangible tension. I'm excited already.

Oh, hotness. I could use much, much more of this.

"Organizing what?" Spot fired back, not waiting for answer. "That's bull. Jacky-boy's got himself caught up in a lie so big he can't see it. Licking somebody else's boots ain't a job." Spot gave a disapproving wag of his head and flicked ash off his cigarette. "He never was a real leader."

This is so accurate to what we see in the movie. Nicely done.

Also, the (Sprave? Dot?) sex was hot.

Oh: "Mesmerized, Jack rubbed his thumb over David's parted lips and watched its slow progress. He looked up to find David's eyes closed."

Oh, ooh, ooh!

That was incredible.

Only you could do justice to this pairing.

This is David at his best. He’s not the run-of-the-mill counterpart of Jack Kelly. This David has substance. He’s intelligent, brave, passionate, and is a strong character in his own right.

This is Spot the way I love him. Strong, intense, lusty and full of surprises.

I doubt that I will ever again smell the salt air and wet sand of New York’s shoreline without thinking of this chapter.

oh my god. You just left me speechless cym. Literally, I finished reading, and my mouth dropped open and I just stared at the screen. haha
that was an amazing scene. So well-written, so in character for Spot, the images you created were made of yummyness... lol :)
I am now hooked on Spavid. yay!
Update soon!
~Braids

How did I miss that you’d posted?

Great setup.

This isn’t the same old balcony scene. It’s a fresh new look at the boys after the strike. New opportunities, new responsibilities, and new character dynamics.

David is strong and steady. Jack is an overgrown kid playing in a grown-up world.

I’m anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

cymbalism, my dear, you have really outdone yourself this time! Amazing setup, I am now totally drawn in to this story. Can't wait to see what you have in store, as I want to see how the Spavid plays out! An excellent start, and update soon!
~Braids