fantastically well written, the repetitiveness helped to ground the story and it's various settings and the sorrow was very intricately woven throughout because of it.

I loved the ways in which you compared the two boys while describing the physical nature of the relationships in a very tasteful way, leaving the ending open and satisfactorily concluded at the same time.

I'm very glad I stumbled upon this beautiful story. Well done, you should be proud of yourself.

You suck.



...kidding. Actually, it was really good. Really. =)
I like the angst of Axel/Sora~

Not. At. All. You, my friend, certainly do not 'suck'. In fact, quite the opposite. This vignette was splendidly written and the repition, in fact, only leant to its rather morose and bittersweet conclusion.
Axel is stuck in a such a vicious cycle...and there isn't much he can do about it.

Your structure- both grammatically and story-based- were firm and sound. I really did enjoy reading this; it had an excellent flow.

Nice.
~AL