I'm gonna say this straight. Confusing. It's beautiful...but it seems as though this is the beginning of a side story to something else you have written, and I don't believe it is. Though you writing flows easily and is very...I just can't describe it, but it's beautiful, you need to add...not more detail, but maybe another event or dialogue to help the reader understand. Someon I know is a MASTER (exaggerated) at understanding most types of writing, and she barely got the idea (doesn't have an account). I'd give it around a 9.1 out of 10.

Ignore that review. She or he obviously hasn't noticed that what you said is true.

To that other anonymous reviewer, if you ever see this: What fallenxfate said in her summary is pretty much true. If you've been around the Kamichama Karin fandom long enough, you'll notice that everyone is completely obsessed with KarinxKazune, and very few people will even read the story if it isn't KxK. I admire her (er, him?) for writing something that isn't KarinxKazune. And even if she doesn't get that many reviews, she is still writing amazing stories that no one bothers to look at, and the reviewers don't determine your future. You do. ...Or something.

And so ends my rant.

you know why no one's read this story? It's because you made yourself sound like a total ass in the summary. You should learn to be more considerate of your readers, they're the ones who determine your future on this site.

I like the summary ^^

I'm sort of confused, but the more I read it I start to understand a little. I don't usually read stories/one-shots/whatever with Jin and Michiru, but since it's you, I guess I can give it a shot. Something that's not KxK is a nice change, although I do hope more people will read it...

xTsubasa