Amazing story! I really enjoyed it! Very moving!

Love the last line. So smart, so perfect. Very good story. One suggestion, the BIG paragraph, a bit hard to handle visually, so maybe next time try to break it up into smaller paragraphs. But otherwise great story! And again, love that last sentence!

Ooh, nice story! We never have enough new CJ ones. I liked how you used the emotion; if I didn't just get out of the pool and have cholorine in my eyes (which dries them up) I'd probably be on the verge of tears. Anyway, very good!