better than "The sun rises" (which by the way should probably be a second chapter to this one.)

and by the way neither of these should really be rated mature

anyway thats all

So, I wrote you this really long review with all these specific things saying all the parts of this story I totally loved. But then the internet ate it. So I'm sorry, I can't write it all again. I'll just say what I remember.

In the beginning, you mentioned Chiyo getting saved by slayers from a Japanese vampire. Are you a Buffy fan? That sounds kind of like the last season 8 comic I read. I need to catch up on season 8. But, yeah, I thought that was cool.

I also mentioned that this story is really well written. You did a great job with the characterization. You totally got all of their personalities, Sakaki, Chiyo, and Kaorin.

I also liked how subtle it was. It wasn't really obvious that Chiyo and Sakaki were girlfriends until almost the end, but it was hinted at. I love how delicately you worked that.

I really loved this story. This is one of my all-time favorite pairings and you did a really god job with it. So, yeah, sorry I couldn't give you the whole long review that I put so much effort into. But you totally made my day with this story. ^_^