Wtf? Too mushy, lovey, dovey...

No reception? Psh and Jareth was all dressed for the Masquerade Ball Take Two. Thanks for sharing.)

very sweet, however, you may want to read through it again (especially the first 5 paragraphs) to ensure that you don't repeat yourself too often.

Very Nice! Neferu throws a handful of rice.)

I'm sorry to say that this is horribly written. Your misuse of commas is rampant, and why are there question marks in the wedding vows were they not sure they wanted to be together forever? A lot of your sentences are very choppy, and there are no transitions to speak of. Description is seriously lacking, except when describing the dress and that does not make much sense. Your writing might be helped by reading your work out loud before posting.

aw this is how it should have been xx

thanks xx

I'm not sure about this... it seems like an excerpt from a larger story. There's not a lot of background to go with it, and the actions were very short lived...

I honestly adore how mild-mannered you and your stories are. However sometimes I think you should flare out a little. Let loose your pent up emotion and just let it shower of your writing. Let your spirit soar as the hawk with the wind(or in this case the Barn owl). I also would like to see more then one-shots from you. I think you have done two stories that are over a thousand words... I mean you have talent and I would like to see a longer tale that could even perhaps outshine the bard himself!

Reality check: Good? Yes. Outdo William Shakespeare? No. However still good.

Please don't make your only long fic about Snape...

They didn't invite any goblins to the wedding? Thanks for sharing.

T_T, that was very sweet.