You said you wanted intelligent feedback, so prepare yourself.

I agree, the Noah battle definitely isn't among the best you've written. It was a bit awkward in some places, but I know exactly how that is so don't worry about it.

Now, you have a really good writing style. My only issue is that often when you write dialogues you get somewhat repetetive, like you use one word a bit too often or you have the character state the same thing pretty much over and over. It interrupts the story and stops its flow. Especially when Allen hugged the kids and told them not to worry and all that, you used "you both" a bit too much, "you" would've been just fine after the first "you both".

Also, I hate to say that Miranda was really quite awfully OOC when she appeared. I really can't see her give orders like that, and the way she talked in general just made her seem like some sort of alien. It just bothered me quite a lot. Otherwise, the characterizations were good. :3 Although I'm sorta wondering why Allen runs into another roadblock with his Innocence since I personally always thought that once you reach critical you're done with that. But I guess that's for every individual to decide until we get to know more about Innocence - if we ever do. So I won't complain.

And I'm also not sure about the possibility of an Exorcist RETIRING. Would the Order allow that? I dunno, even if there was never a real confirmation that that would happen (I guess that was because you're finishing the whole thing up and not planning to write anymore?), the idea just seems... I dunno, I can't see that being an option for the Exorcist. I always thought they fight until they die.

But~ Other than that, this was a good finish to the story. :3 Again, you've got a good writing style and I really enjoy reading your work. It was sweet and the general ideas of it all was good. You didn't play things out the way I would, but it's not my story so I won't tell you that there's anything wrong with that.

Good luck with your writing! And hope this review was what you wanted...?

~Toss

omg! yay ur back!! =D
thanks so much for finishing this, so glad u didnt kill allen
hope ull b able to make another fanfic, but if not, thanks for all the stories, theyre brill =)

So great... XD

LOVE IT! XD

OMG/OMG/OMG/OMG/OMG!
hey! you sure took long to update! but it was somewhat worth
the waiting, but hey, i don't want Allen to dye D:
and... hmn...I was going to write something, but I don't remember
the damn thing I was going to write! ò.ó Hasn't it happened
to you before? Its frustrating, well amn... ah yes! no... my brain
isn't cooperating with me...well its late and I'm sleepy,
I'll review later... seeya!! <3

ps. nice chapter!!I'm waiting for the next one,
even if it takes you a year! :D It's certainly a very good and
long-lasting story! and certainly a persistent plot! n.n

hello!!hey, i have been reading all this series, i mean, from lost reason to this, and i started yesterday, they are really awesome!! they are really worth the wait for you to update the chapters... but i only beg you something... if you are going to make allen die... don't do it too painful... i hate to see allen sufer... or lavi... but if you don't make allen die and by some kind of miracle he lives... I LOVE YOU!...

i am really looking forward for next capter... i'm dying to know what happens!

your whole serious was awesome I enjoyed reading each one. *Cries* poor Allen he is reaching him limit poor kid.

Please do not make Allen die.. I love him to much. Anyway, there is something i must ask. Are Lavi and Allen a sucker for tears when it comes to their kids?

Wow! I really cried when Allen told Lavi that he would die sooner or later T_T

I seriously had a few moments where I had to get up and leave while reading this. It was just so sad and I didn't want my roommate to look at me with any more of her "God, you're so weird" looks. But it was the good sad that was so IC and plausible and magnificent that I give you a million gold stars for its sheer brilliance.

I really did miss the kids and Lavi and Allen love, despite now it's turning down a darker road. Even though it's selfish of me, I'd love it if you found some way to keep Allen alive. However, if you do plan on killing him at the end, I'm sure it'll be just as poetic and wonderful as the rest of your work.

I would have more to say, but I'm hanging by a thread to consciousness now after my adrenaline kicked in and kept me awake long enough to read the alert in my inbox and then to suck up this chapter like a sponge. It's off to sleep now...

Hope to see more, more, more when you can~!

I warn you .. u better not kill anyone of them
or elas ..
- take out shinny knife -
See this knife ? KUFUFU .
NOO ALLEN!

Just... plase don't kill Allen. Really. It wouldn't just be heartbreaking; having to read through Lavi and the kids' suffering after his death would be literally painful, and I'm almost sure I'll have my eyes full of tears if that happens.

so please, please, please, find a way to save him...? don't let him die. plase.

~Silence

aww, good luck on everything that you took up to do!! Especially the NaNo; you can do it!! :D

I'm sorry to say though that this chapter didn't really pique my interest all too much though I did partially enjoy the flashback. But I understand that you're busy so no need to take this too harshly (I hope). Well then, I'll be seeing you I guess ^^

awesome chapter man! Keep it up!

Wai~

Finally! New Chapter!

Can't wait the next one ^^

As always, your stories are awesomeness! Good job!