just a drabblee? this was so much more than that. lol. great job!

You know you did a good job, cause I only review the good stories. I really do like this couple. You got my imagination running wild, and that's something, cause I'm ususally so very picky.
Love ya for this,
Yoji

Very nice! Great work!

-Lilith

I really liked it.

thank you for sharing.

Aw, very cute. I have to say, I was expecting something a bit darker, but this was good.

I have a little note, and I hope you don't take this as a flame, but I think you've fallen into the new writer cliche of writing a cute, fluffy one shot quickie. This is not a bad thing, necessarily, since I love fluff as much as I love angst, and Goddess knows I've written enough fluff meself, but I see more potential in you.

Let me explain. You are a good writer, and I'd like to see you try your hand at something with a little more depth. Something that explores the emotions more, that really drags you into the drama and the romance of a relationship between Harry and Sev. I was expecting something a bit more like that, especially considering the challenge.

Again, I really hope you don't take this as a flame, because I didn't intend it to be. I just want to help you reach the potential that I see in your writing.

My final word is to not let others' opinions stop you from writing what you enjoy writing. Yes, there are certainly people who will criticize you for writing Snarry, but the majority of people on this (and other) writing websites can appreciate good quality writing, even if they don't like the ship. Not to mention, Snarry does have a rather large fanbase, so you'll find plenty of support there.

Again, great writing, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

Hugs,

~Crim

That was great!

Short and sweet. I liked it. Maybe Harry will find his motivation in Severus ;)

This was not bad, although I'm more into longer stories.