is it supposed to be this sad?
and kira should know how to fight cuz he's the Ultimate Coordinator right?

i like it so far, update soon!

Ok, first of all you really didn't need authors note on the fact that families hate each other. Please stop will all the caps in the notes, lol. You might what to look into so of the grammar, its not bad but there are quite a few little things like missing caps at dialog starts,names, and clunky sentences.

The idea for the story is good, I am interested in seeing how your going to go about the story. Is it going to be a story of their trails to keep their love or a tail or their blossoming forbidden romance? Either way I am looking forward to more.

Well that wasn't really like Kira but it's your story so -applause-. I liked it!