you were insanly brave to write this but i kinda hafta say i do NOT like this and please don't be offended i'm just trying to say try again i will give you a few tips 1. try not to make it sound so damn sad 2. get some bittersweet comedy in there too lastly listen to one and two but not to much 'cause if you do that it starts to sound kinda forced so ta-taa for now p.s i know with this weird sense like a phychics that your next story is gonna be way better than anybody's twin silver moons out.

Beautiful - an insightful look into their relationship. They're my favourite pairing, your story did them justice, nice work!

Well done, great job!

What a great story. I really like the depth that you go into with their feelings; the preogression of Misao's perception of Aoshi and her love for him and then her final reaction to kissing him. I think the way she describes his kiss probably describes the whole progression best: "They didn't taste of sweet candy, like in my childhood fantasies, but of bitter tea." Please continue to write great stories like this! ^_^

Beautiful. It went from startlingly sad and heartbreaking to just perfect. You always did write the best Aoshi/Misao fics :3

I have forgotten how deep this pairing can get. The different depths of their relationship: one side closed off, the other too open. Also, I just read some of the earlier stories you had written. Makes me remember how much I loved Aoshi/Misao. Thanks.

This is probably the best non-fluffy/happy Aoshi/Misao I've read in a while. Not that it's depressing, but it has more raw emotion outside of beleiving it will all be okay and such. Especially regarding Misao. She's not exuberant or cheerful, she's actually quite sullen for her character, which I think strengthens this piece.
Excellent work!


PS - Is this part of your practicing short stories?

i think this fits them pretty well especially the ending. Good work!