update

ok here comes theimprovements
diclaimer: this is NOT a flame

"Ash stretched his arms and yawned. After a refreshing sleep, he felt ready to start the day. Pikachu, who had fallen asleep in the pack the night before, jumped out and onto Ash’s shoulder. Ash picked up his pack to find that Brock had left for breakfast already. Ash walked out of the room and into the lobby of the Center, where he saw Zoey and Dawn eating breakfast. He walked over to them and sat down."

-The name Ash is overused here, you cold have put; the boy, the trainer...


In later parts of your chapter you state of a character "I", who is that person because he/she did not apear before.
Logic indicates it's Ash. If so you should write ; "Ash's pov" before you converte to I.

Interesting story. Update soon.

I like this story a lot but where i chap 3??

So, you FINALLY updated! YES! Please, try and update the next chapter sooner!

A Abilityshipping story! SQUEE! Update soon! I would like to know who the person narrating is!

A pretty good start, but I think you accidentally switched between fisrt and third POV half way through. AbilityShip is always good, though.

Good start!