A great story. Very good.

That was real...I don't think this si the right word...but pretty. It's makes sence in my head. That last line just made it. Those last seven words made the whole one shot fic. beautiful. Absolutly lovely.

That was a nice moment in time. I like how took the observer's POV instead of delving into the roiling emotions of the observed. Good job.

Ooh,very angsty. Liked it muchly.