I'm a Tenchi fan from way back, I've always thought Kiyone much put upon. Makes me want to pull out my old VHS tapes and rewatch them all. Your story reminded me of the episode Kiyone was worked the diner and at the end Mihoshi steps off the train (?) I dont remember now. Good story thanks Atchika

I beg to disagree with The Knight. This story was not good in the least. I will concede that it was written in a fair style (not much to no grammar errors or mispellings, not just boring sentences strung together, etc). However, this story, in attempting to analyze Kiyone, has deviated far from the actual Kiyone's personality. Kiyone, to begin with, would never, ever dream happily about being the head of a criminal organization! Her only goal in life seems to be to fight galactic crime, and she is really quite determined in the series to do it. Next, her feelings toward Mihoshi have been very incorrectly portrayed. Kiyone's feelings toward Mihoshi tend to be confusing to figure out, but the bottom line is that she feels very strongly for Mihoshi, probably having the equivolant of one's feelings towards an annoying, hopelessly inept and clumsy sibling. Kiyone would never truly want to kill her, just as (hopefully) no older brother or sister truly wants to kill a younger brother or sister, no matter how tempting the prospect can be. Overall, your story was a good attempt at understanding Kiyone, but it went about it all wrong.

Well, Warhammer. You know me, and I know you. I know that you have never turned out anything bad. And, well, this 'tradition' has continued. It makes one realize exactly how few fics have anything from Kiyone's point of view. Fortunately, to fill in these gaps, there's people like you. Yoku Dekimashita!:does a really cool backflip move... off a skyscraper. But when the spectator rushes over to see the body, there is nothing::