Once more, I loved this. You have a knack for getting inside your characters heads. Thanks for writing it. x

I think you've captured Alanna well, and George, too.

On the contrary, I find your writing quite good, actually. I think you've managed to capture Alanna's reflective side perfectly and you accurately portray the relationship between Alanna and Aly. I kinda imagined that they wouldn't ever really be able to get along well, just because they're such different people.
Cheers!
dormouse

Well. You certainly do NOT suck at writing Alanna. It was great, except she doesn't call her daughter "Alianne". She calls her "Aly", too. I loved this, it was really cute. Great job!

that last line was very ominous... oh dear. what next?