cute

great, and you should continue with the fluffiness and cant wait till update. bye

Very cute and fluffy for Teatime and Susan, and yet not so fluffy that it was completely OOC. Good job. ... will it continue? *puppy dog eyes*

tee hee,I never even read hogfather or watched the entire movie but from the beginning the shipper in me wanted them to get together, I'm so happy that I'm not the only one who thinks so.

It was OOC but what the hey I loved it! FLUFFY CUTE! Great writing!

Iz so fluffy, I just want to pat them on their heads like bobble head toys.

Aw... I do so love Susan/Teatime...

Admittedly, I think this all went a little fast. Susan is not the sort of woman to immediately accept Teatime's advances. She'd be furious, and she'd fight, and there'd be a beauteous struggle between the two of them. Maybe a year from that first fateful Hogswatch where they met, after lots of fighting and all that, this could happen. But it's altogether cute and fluffy, and I enjoyed it.

ROFL

First off, I love your use of language in this. Second off, I like that it's suggestive but not graphic. And third...you just win at life. :)

Seven things:
1) "I was cold": lol
2) “Teh-ah-ta-may.”: I believe it's pronounced Te-ah-tim-eh
3) "From there, things got weird." : They were weird from quite a while before...
4) “As I have just demonstrated, I don’t need you to move.” Susan said smugly.: O.o wtf?
5) I think you should have explained a bit more why Death brought him in her bedroom and so soon.
6) Susan would at least slap or kick him once or twice
7) Some parts were out of character VERY MUCH!

Overall: I liked it! It was funny and interesting... A bit disturbing too... I'd like to see more... ^^

Aww, completely OOC for them a lot of the time - but a cute story none the less. It gives some amusing mental images.