Another interesting chapter, I look forward into seeing what happens next.

Yay new chapter, its a good chapter but I wonder what will happen next.

Aw... I almost hope when it's all over that Mamoru and Ranma get together. Rei might have been willing to give up Mamoru for Usagi's sake, but I doubt Ranma's going to do the same thing. Plus what about what Mamoru might want once he gets turned back to normal?

He was searching for the Moon Princess and winds up with two different versions of her in two seperate people who are in love with him, though I say Ranma's growing feelings have been around longer than Usagi's. *lol*

This is getting interesting, I wonder will Ranma choose and how it will affect the other senshi?

Another interesting chapter which leaves me to wonder what will happen next.

Yes I went and read back. The thing is I don't think Usagi's wish would be retroactive and well I never really do see anywhere that Ranma's ability to transform on her own gets explained. I think you have an opportunity coming up. Especially with how the appearances of Queen Serenity end up happening at the end of this Story Ark.

I figure after refreshing myself on that point and looking at the time line it wouldn't hurt to have something about the transformation. I mean it's not like everyone who went into that spring in Jusenkyo got the same ability assist.

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I'm a little confused about something. How is Ranma-ko still transforming to Sailor Moon without borrowing the hat or having the crystal any more?

That wasn't exactly a healing rod feature.

Is it Usagi's Wish or is there more to it?

This isn't going to lead to another Chibi-Usa where Ranma's the Mother is it?

Why aren't Ranma and Artemis trying to see if the Tendo Dojo and Male Ranma could help with training the Senshi to be more skilled in close quarters combat?

I bet if Makoto had an excuse for her Sempai to teach the team she'd leap at the opportunity.

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Another good chapter, I look forward to seeing the next chapter and what happens next.

Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon.

Another great with an interesting plot twist.

I like your story except for one flaw, the short chapters get annoying I have to change chapters every five minutesm otherwise keep up the good work

Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon.

Another great chapter and I wonder if the moon princess will actuall suceed at the contest.

Clever concept and some amusing scenes, but, so far, you've got a fairly major problem with mixed tenses and "telling rather than showing". (Stating the events in a bland fashion without fleshing them out using character opinions, thoughts, and a decent use of metaphor, simile, or details from all five senses)

Once I've caught up to my coursework, I could help you get the hang of rewriting to fix things if you'd like. (I'm a great editor and proofreader, but I write fiction so slowly that I can't justify the time-expenditure to write my own stories yet.)

another good chapter that ties up whats been going on.