That was great! I loved the duel; you write them very well. That was really interesting, and I enjoy it. But, I have to say one thing:Don't make Vince too powerful! He has super-ultra rare cards, won the duel (though he struggled; nice touch), and has glowing eyes XD. Any more powers and he might seem like a gary-stu. He doesn't yet, but he could! This is a really unique and well-written story, and I don't want that to happen. Just somthing to look out for! Other than that, I think it's really impressive. Ray and Vince make a cute couple =D. Just saying!

Nice. Very nice. That was a great chapter! You set the whole thing;This chapter explained a lt for the future, am I correct? I love that. And Ray should be important, I'm guessing as well! Good job. This is a really unique plot, so you have me completely interested. Excellent chapter!

I really want to know what happens next!
Dieing to know who Kaiba's paired with
lolz Update soon

Interesting! You left me curious. it was well done;I could picture everything. I loved the new twist you left! Nicely done.