Beautiful. I love Lucy's part, the likening of her to a "lioness", and also the way that you likened Susan's forgetting of Narnia to her becoming a "dumb animal" like the ones in The Magician's Nephew.

Lovely, so well-written and in-character. I must say, the likening of Peter to Reepicheep took me by surprise, but it was quite fitting. Absolutely beautiful.

A great story. Very good.

Loved it. Especially the part about susan and the comparison with he bear!
Luna

Ooh, what a heart-wrenching story. I think Peter's was probably my favorite, although they are all very good. I love the way you paralleled him and Reepicheep; I must admit that I'd never thought of that before. And you do have a knack for writing anguishing Susan stuff. (stuff is such a bad word for it but bear with me).

"He would like to think he’s got it all sorted..." I LOVE that, because just like in the movie, he doesn't and it's up to Edmund to fix it.

"When he falls asleep in Peter’s dorm room late at night, he dreams his brother’s stifled sobs of frustration are wingbeats." That almost made me cry...

"Unfortunately, and as his younger brother often reminds him, Peter cannot lie for beans. Not even to himself." But that made me chuckle.

"But at night, when dreams turn him into a king again, he still imagines returning, not for the sake of his dignity, but for the love of his people." That was so good - wrapping up the tie-ins with Reepicheep.

"Lucy remains gay and golden-haired, even in a world that finds it odd and inappropriate." I love the tie-in with the end of LWW.

"She shifts her mind-gaze off of Narnia." I love the way that you worded that. Oh, but Susan's slow fade is agonizing.

Oh the poor Pevensie kids. Narnia was like a blessing and a curse all in one at times. I can't imagine being in Susan and Peter's positions and knowing that they can never go back - that would be awful. Even if I never did go back I'd still want to be able to hold on to the hope that someday I might be back again. And the pain of losing Narnia allows me to better understand why Susan became what she did - because it's easier to forget about it and escape from it than it is to face the facts and accept it. Wonderful story!

As wonderful as always. I loved the part about Lucy being a lioness, and thought it was very appropriate. I always enjoy a theme repetition, if even for a paragraph. Great job, I am looking forward to reading more of your work!

really nice that line "The intelligence and wit with which she used to dazzle her suitors in Narnia rot in a corner of her brain" was really...just shocking and spot on i think. great job and poor Peter :)

How is that you always manage to rip my heart out? Have I not cried enough over your stories? Gez, man what did they do to you in Japan? *sniff*

I cry for Peter and Susan. To be forever exiled from their Home is too much. I've seen Prince Caspian four or five times and I cry each time at the end. Your story magnifies that and turn me to mush. Poor Susan, what a reality check when she gets the telegram and what an analogy.

If I touch you, will some of that talent rub off on me? Great job on a story well done, and welcome home.

Rolletti

This is brilliant, glowing, and beautiful. You capture emotion so perfectly that it makes my heart ache. Edmund and Lucy are coping well, because they realise that they are going back, but Peter lost something and he cant deal with it. I loved the analogy of Reepicheep's tail. And Susan's part made me cry.

This was amazing, as your stories always are. Thank you.

Shadow

Aw everyone's dealing in their own way! I especially love the spirit and power in Lucy! As the baby she really displays, in a way, the most strength out of them all! Nice piece!

Wow, this was really great. I really liked the girls' ones, especially Lucy's, but the last remark about Susan must be the best ever. It was great and I wonder why no one else never used that comparision before. It's spot on. A great fic!

The last line was so amazingly sad but heartbreakingly beautiful and poetic at the same time - it almost made me cry! As always, you captured each of the Pevensies' characters perfectly - I particularly liked Lucy's. Another amazing story from an amazing author.

Gorgeous. I'm amazed by the ease with which you switch from one Pevensie to another; I think that this could easily come off as choppy, but here it flows remarkably well. I also loved your characterization; but especially Edmund's. I really liked the image of him as the gryphon "circling patiently above, waiting to be needed." And, of course, the last line in the piece was devastating and so, so right, somehow. Fantastic work.

Magnificent. The way the four cope so differently with leaving Narnia yet again... it's beautiful. Thank you for a wonderful piece of writing.
-ilysia