Gah... tisnt due to the awesumness of the Whore renesmee tis discontued to the UNAWESUMNESS! of the WHORE! ILY!:-*

aww, i wished u had finished this story;

i wrote a story in new moon thats DIDNT HAPPEN IN THE BOOK

Im a tough critic- like you, so here it goes.

I didnt like it at all. It's completely out of character. And the plot is completely cliche. Maybe if you practiced writing before you subbmitted, you could have a better style of writing. plus, so far, it's just another imprint story. Make it good and I'll keep reading.

Cullen

great first chapter! i find it funny how a werewolf got scared of a squrrile..hehe

its nice for people to see how jake feels..wonder how this will turn out..

i know im not supposed to say update soon, but im saying it anyway:

UPDATE SOON! hmm...it does sound lame..how about..:

KEEP WRITING FOR THE SAKE OF WORLD PEACE!(or ill start WW3)

that works

from fatima, the lebanese bella:)

This is great. it shows how jake feels.