WOW not bad at all. With it being M rating i was looking for a bit more explicit but you know what i actually do LOVE this story just the way it is. It just fits with both characters so well and is more angsty then explicit and i do love my angst and sexual tension stories a whole lot to. Hunger great story and a very fitting title as it makes me very hungry to have this happen for real lol. Good job.

Very in character! Great story (:

I like...very much! PLEASE continue it! Extremely well written - this could really go places. Well done you!

I like it! Love it even...

i hate how people keep changing jack so that he would give a damn, but you didn't, that's great!

even though there wasn't actual smut, i have to say it was really hot and really good

What? You cut it off there? No! I demand a part 2. I demand it be so! Your decision to put it in present tense just sucked me right in, along with the dreaminess of the beginning, remembering all her mother said and then having it apply to the situation. This is too good to leave it as it is, darling. It has so much potential, Jack's hot words diving right into Liz, their hands, their tongues...it's a literary orgasm just about to happen.

Woaw, that was simply superb. :3 I loved every line.

Liz

Very well written. I liked it. Well done.

You write really well )), especially the part with the bedtime stories...

ABSOLUTELY love JOHNNY DEPP. 'cause he's hot. and adore KEIRA KNIGHTLEY. 'cause she's brit (and pretty). :)