I'm glad to read a story (other than mine) that was for the LGBT gamer audience. It seemed to be lacking, though. Perhaps, if you had the time and the desire, you could really make something out of one or all of these snippits. Thought I'd answer your call for female gamers. Appreciate your story!

I don't hate it at all! It's hillarious!
I love you personalisations of the playable characters. They were just as i thought they should be.

I played Call of Duty 3, and you hit each of the characters spot on. Good Work!