Once again you have managed to beat published authors at their own game, and I am in complete awe. Jack is brilliant and cunning and draws me in like no other character bothers to do, this is by far one of the most (if not the most) brilliant piece on this website.

Out of all fanfiction authors, you easily place in my top five--top three, even. Your works, too, hold various places of high esteem in my mind. This one in particular...

It represents what it's saying oh-so well. Jack is a wild mishmash--and that's what this piece is, really. Its chaos is carefully placed, it seems, and extremely well executed. The metaphors and the emotional imagery they build are ingenious--especially because of your word choice, which is, on a whole, brilliant. I rarely see you wasting space. Accomplishment, there. Strong word choice in reading material isn't come by easily, these days, but it's most certainly present, here. You seem to have a natural bent towards alliteration, and that also plays very nicely into the overall feel of your works--and as I said, this one especially. Everything compounds to create a drool-worthy sense of emotion.

Your writing style is certainly admirably, but you back up the flair and competence with solid, well-formed ideas--not just plot, but opinions, and ones that are worked in with subtle finesse.

For this piece in particular... the sheer number of Jacks you actually included is astounding, as lesser writers would be tempted to leave a good number of those you mentioned *out*. The basic foundation of this concept is gravitating (...perhaps because I am such a fan of various Jacks, and their appearance in literature, but also because you portrayed it so wonderfully). There's obviously not a... plot, but the subject was done a great deal of justice. The spinning glimpses of Jack were, simply put, amazing.

Well. Just popping in to say that you have a slew of wonderful pieces of writing, and that this is... probably amongst my favorites.

There are some writers on this site that I truly hope are published so that one day I will read their words in a book on my shelf. You are one of those.

woah, that was interesting...and very complex. i shall have to reread this again sometime later!

absolutely beautiful.

Interesting.

this blew me the fuck away. amazing. absolutely stunning. you have this brilliant malevolent poetic way of crafting words and it has left me speechless.

You're just way too good at this. Keep it up!

Bizarre and beautiful. There was something very hypnotic about reading it.